Silence is Her

[Vikkie™]

The sound of mistrung strings from a dingy room
Her music
The feeling of demented thoughts and feelings
Her soul
The last night I spent with her at the hospital
Her highlight of life
The blaring sirens and misrythymed beeps
Her new music
The slight smirk on her ever so pale face
Heaven
The light that shined from the ceiling upon her
Her retirement
The wave of her hand indicated for me to come near
Her last words
The slightest whisper that I misunderstood at the time
Her Will
The tears that strung down her face into the bed
My sorrow
This pain in my eyes that I've never felt
My soul
The strange tapping of my foot to no sound
Her silence
The words I've finally understood after so long
I Love You
My response wasn't the greatest but got me through
God loves you

[D. Josey]

Meh.

I'm tired of getting on kids about this, but some of th is works be repetitive and unoriginal, 'nah whati'msayin'?

Alright. Vocabulary was basic. I did scope out a few times where you tried to go advanced, and that was fine but some words were spelled wrong or weren't words at all. "Misrhythmed" isn't a word.

All in all, this piece was basic, and I didn't like it.