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  1. August 14th, 2006, 02:05 AM #1
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    Is this RANDOM enough for You?

    When you think about the whole thing,
    The soul, what you have, a telephone ring
    A roof, money, Shoot funny lyrics is my task
    No spirit is here so I pour beer in my flask
    You've got freedom, AT LAST!!... I think... Sort of...
    You at least can write shit on here and get supportive
    Review- Or retort and read through other pieces.
    Get chained by these three-twained leather leashes...
    To each his own, I get you, do your thing-
    I accept you, God bless you, I guess you're inspiring...
    It's hard to admit...
    But I know that it's true...
    Parliament's the shit, and so is the Who...
    Erroneus to the loneliest crew...
    Show me the few... Songs that Impress me
    So I can Express these Emotions to You...
    We argue and feud, blatantly hateful-
    Take it and wait til' I'm drunk-
    Zoloft is so soft, I'm switchin' to punk...
    Fuck this crunk shit that we all rock out to
    Deuschbags bumpin, I'm blastin' Sublime, Devout to-
    Good music, Would choose it for Glee -but- they -Re-fuse it
    And we must keep goin', Keep flowin' this drug-induced shit...
    No excuses, I'm alive cuz I'm fortunate
    Never fucked no bitch who walked around like (this), cavortin' it...
    I'm not sober, I don't lie...
    I think that my blessings are alive so I can't die
    And caressings from my individual nestings tie-
    The bond That can't Be broken...
    I was spawned within a psalm interwoven,
    With verses from Shakespeare.
    Hither we go, And energy glows
    Like synnergy flows with fate's sphere.
    Impede my progress, Rid me of pride
    I concede this song just endorses my vibe..
    I'll probably take all of my fears to my coffin-
    Funeral with resoundin' cheers, I'll steal my tears from janice joplin...


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=304942
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=305352
    Last edited by Engivale; August 14th, 2006 at 02:09 AM

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    "She managed to extract from the restriction itself a further delicate thought, like good poets whom the tyranny of rhyme forces into the discovery of their finest lines."
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  2. August 14th, 2006, 02:45 AM #2
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    This was ill, I'm going to bed right now, but I'll edit in some real feedback when I wake up.

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    Again this was ill.. It reminded me alot of how I write. Streaming consciousness.. Let the words do the talking, not you.. Right? Flow was on point throughout the whole thing, which is always a plus, and makes for a much easier read. I liked this alot. I'll be keeping my eye out for more of your stuff most definately.
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  3. August 14th, 2006, 01:43 PM #3
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    ^uppin

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    "She managed to extract from the restriction itself a further delicate thought, like good poets whom the tyranny of rhyme forces into the discovery of their finest lines."
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  4. August 14th, 2006, 04:01 PM #4
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    It flowed it flowed lol.....Like all your works i am always impressed by the fluency of one line connecting with the other. For some reason this piece was much more enjoyable to me than your last. You seemed more free when wrting this and your thoughts didn't seem restrained either. I got hints of a topic then of another.

    Review- Or retort and read through other pieces.
    ^There i thought you were talking about this website.

    Zoloft is so soft, I'm switchin' to punk...
    ^And there a whole different topic. a bit like the new om from Vortex, were you both drunk whilst writing lol...No harm done though cause both drops were nice reads.

    I was spawned within a psalm interwoven
    That was a very well written line. clever.
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    Overall, i liked this it was a very fluid piece...Stay up^
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  5. August 14th, 2006, 07:51 PM #5
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    This was sick and i just got busy, but i think it deserved more replys so lemmie up it for you and if i remember drop a real reply
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  6. August 14th, 2006, 08:46 PM #6
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    "To each his own, I get you, do your thing-
    I accept you, God bless you, I guess you're inspiring..."
    LMAO, sick.


    this was some hippie ass shit, cool cuz i never seen the approach, i actually liked it and i like only one of the music you mentioned........... sublimes sick. the rest suck. nice i like the style and topic. lmao, your wild. dope.

    return the favor to my On Top Of The World peice
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  7. August 14th, 2006, 08:51 PM #7
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    U dont like The Who, Parliament, Shakespeare or Janice Joplin? Get to downloading my man, listen with open ears and REALLY listen. Only thing I'll allow you to be doing aside from listening to their music (or reading a Shakespeare sonnet) is smoking weed and drinking. And by drinking, I mean licquor, by the shot, be a man and get drunk and feel their words. ESPECIALLY Janice Joplin, if she doesn't make you cry after listening to about half a dozen songs when you're drunk, you're dead inside.

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  8. August 14th, 2006, 08:54 PM #8
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    lmao fuck that. I can listen to immortal tech for them feelings.
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  10. August 15th, 2006, 11:50 AM #10
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    yeah i sure checked it out. but must say on the real i wasnt exactl knocked out much by this. i done seen you flow waaaay doper than this.

    i mean its like even the flow became random. which diddnt totaly work.

    you had some ill bars here and there tho for real. rhyming was crafted well. just a couple end rhymes i diddnt like much. like "sort of" rhyming w/ "supportive" doesnt work for me. . . had some good underlying humour still tho. like more of a giggle than a belly laugh............could of maybe been made a touch nfunnier with a couple more random psychotic punches or mettas or something like that...ending was coo....


    still mos def had some "out there" wordplays and associations.ha

    yeah was entertaining still in parts. and a solid song form no doubt


    stay 1


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