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    Boxed In..Cubix Box Collab

    Boxed In

    Ja Eazy

    While your dreams are shattered, keeping your feelings inside
    Its all those sad feelings that you want out but have to hide
    your minds in a box and in a split second the walls close fast
    Everything u needed to tell someone thats important, turns to ash
    Then ur minds in a box and never will know if it will survive
    U dont hear voices just buzzing all day like bein next to a bee hive
    The next mental patient cuz ur spazing wit buzzing in ya head
    Not tellin ppl ur thoughts and keep them boxed leads to being tied to a bed
    All day every day u lay there on ya bed steering at the ceiling
    Ur minds like a race car,thoughts go through ur head wit no healing

    And then..
    2 years later u sit up in the white room to have suicide thoughts electrify
    the first words with in three years and you started to yell out bye-bye
    Doctors and nurses run in the paded cell to find ur hands around ur throat
    some how they saved u while ur half dead wit a stray white tight coat
    with eyes blood shot you sit in front of a god like mind doctor
    he askin you wats ur feelings and all u say is it was the helicopter
    after two straight weeks of the doctor heating the same thing
    he got the story out of him and sounds like he was shit like marin luther king
    now its eight years later all his boxed in thoughts were unraveling
    hes normal and wit a wife, releasing thoughts, sent them traveling



    LOOK$

    My mind’s full with rage again.
    Lost the plot! Am I going insane?
    Can’t stand being trapped in here
    Pushed away and pulled towards the gear.
    I’m down and out on a slippery slope
    The light’s gone out, there is no hope
    I’ve lost my friends and lust for life
    Plagued by destructive emotions running rife.

    I cannot speak for all who stem
    Long roads less traveled as their way,
    Nor question choices made by them
    In days long past or nights long dim
    by words they spoke and did not say.
    From North to South, then back again,
    I followed birds like all the rest
    Escaping nature's snowy den
    On roads I've seen and places been,
    Forsaking roads that traveled West.
    This journey grows now to its end,
    As road reflections lined in chrome
    Give way to roads with greater bend
    And empty signs that still pretend

    CrosT Over

    My brain’s wrapped into a fierce protective coating
    Trapped in this self-manipulated cell that’s floating
    Sound waves can’t penetrate the windows of my mental
    For I’m stubborn as the mule, in my case it’s detrimental
    Eyes burn from the pressure as they realize the torment
    For fire reigns supreme unless I drink myself dormant
    Incased by six walls, to create this eternal nightmare
    Anger, pain and greed construct half of this tight-lair.
    The rest is formed by anxiety, depression, and fear
    Apparently it’s clear, emotionally dried of any tear

    Manipulating the system, but instantly I got booted out
    Toxins entered so quickly, as I traveled the polluted route.
    Deadly smoke pored ferociously in through the corners
    Death notices went to my family turning them to mourners
    Was being deceased truly an event that couldn’t be defeated
    Boxed in, left with standing room only, no room to be seated
    Swung arms frantically trying to find a light for all this dark
    Was I ready to embark, I saw his face light up like a spark
    It was my savior, destroyed my walls, and bridged the gap
    For it was none other than MY LORD, ……………………..
    …………………………….. JESUS woke me from this nap


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=294323

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...65&page=1&pp=15

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    wow this was nice you guys did a pretty good job liked the topic and how you took on it it was a good piece overall just need a better imagery and a bit more creativity to spak the imaginations you know that would make the piece more original in a sense it would just make it overall a better peice to read and make the readers want to continue too read good shit guys~2~

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    Thanx For The Feed ...uppin
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    yea this was a good collab for real...topic was interesting.
    each verse was excellent..nice rhymes and flow.
    vocab and complexity was good most of all...
    overall this was good...keep it up guyz..peace~

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    aight lets get more feed on dis

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    come on people lets get some feed
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    good om
    nice flow
    nice structure but i didn't exactly like the topic but over all it was a good om

    i rate it 8.5/10

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    Thank you bounce for the nice name

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    yoo shits ill flow was nice yall stuck on topic

    Ja eazy and then and then...'s frist too lines rymed soo when i just looked at it real quick too se if it was worth a read it was cool witch was the soul reason i read the piece


    I dont got much too critize good overall piece


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    Drop some feed i'll RTF

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    rise!
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    rise lets get more feed

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    Nice Topic.. Goes Obviously With Cubix Box.

    The Depth Of The Verses Were Very......Umm Deep? Sike Na, But This Was A Good Peice, Each Versec Flowed Into The Next One. The Flow, Structure, Vocab And Rhymeskeem Were Tight And Helped A Vivid Image Come Through As The Reader Reads On.
    Really Good Piece, Well Done.

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    dope collab..i was feeling all verses
    constisted of great vocab, flow and rhymes
    the topic was cool, overall this was dope
    keep it up guyz

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