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    Time Stop's

    (The Worlds Rotation And Time Stops, And It Goes Dark, Except For Me And Only For Me To Be Heard)


    The Grains Of Sand Observe The Pains Of Man With Indifference
    While Free Falling, Re Calling Shameless Plans Of Increments
    An Instant Is Defined By A Second That’s Combined With A Lesson
    Life Is A Sum Of The Seconds, But Some Live A Life Time A Second
    Time Is Perspective, A Seductive Ocean, Conductive Lotion
    Tasteless, Invites You To Waste It, But Some Obstruct The Motion
    An Instructive Potion Of Enlightenment, That’s Heightened When
    Innocence Nixes Ignorance Inside Divine And Righteous Men
    A Dollar Sign Is Time That’s Spent In Hopes Of Securin’ Tomorrow
    Hope Is Blurrin’ The Sorrow That Life Is A Tour And Its Borrowed
    From He With No Start To Finish Who Sees No Heart Or Vision
    The Grandfather Stands Taller And Sleeps In Those Darker Prisms
    Why Honor Wisdom? Well It Passes The Tears Of Time
    The Past Effects The Mind, Through Déjà Vu, Its Passed A Second Time
    I Have To Press Rewind, Far Away Enough The Track Makes A U Turn
    But Few Learn From The Relationship The Past Drapes The Future

    My Time Interval Slots Are Often Spent In Spiritual Block
    So I Pass The Time By Starring At The Hands On A Grand-Father Clock
    Flooded With Cynical Thoughts, I Release The First Notion
    And Freeze The Time By Suspending The Earth’s Motion
    A Surge Potent Enough To Tear The Surfaces Texture In A Sense
    Like Weight Is Measured In Pounds, Time Is Measured In Events
    Text Words Can’t Impress, So I’ll Help You Invision This Certainty
    An Old Timer Has A Short Life, While A Teen Live An Eternity
    Every Ticks An Emergency, With Out It, You’re In An Ocean Of Mess
    Cause Times The Hitchhiker That Leads You On The Roads Of Success
    It Opens The Next Chapters And Captures The Bland Design
    That We Can Live Long And Leave Our Footprints On The Sands Of Time
    Things That Can Distract The Mind And Lead It Away From The Truth In Lesson
    Might Lose Affection For Patience, Yet Perseverance Is A Useful Weapon
    Draw It, It’ll Boost Progression And It Will Erase The Proceedings
    It’s Time To Throw Away My Clocks And Put Faith Back Into My Feelings.

    (Earth’s Rotation Resumes And Time Comes Back To Play Its Role As Life….For I Was Heard And Need To Say No More….)


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    wow I really enjoyed this but iss a little depressing lol. Good imagery, great rhyming, flow wuz perfect. Some of tha lines seemed a little forced in spots, but overall this wuz a good showing. Some lines really stuck out in my mind like:

    An Instant Is Defined By A Second That’s Combined With A Lesson
    Life Is A Sum Of The Seconds, But Some Live A Life Time A Second

    But yeah good job on this one, it's not an overly done topic either so it wuz a refreshing read

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    Man. I read two open mics this morning.. one was from the first person to reply to you.. and hers was fire. Now this one, and this is rediculous. I really enjoyed it. This was well written & easy to read. You had some nice metaphors & symbolizm in there. It flowed really well. Well done.
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    good peice. topic was interesting.
    nice flow. good rhymes!. nice multies.
    vocab was nice throughout.
    imagery was good and overall this was good.
    keep it up

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    Ok Thanx For The Feed..

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