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  1. May 11th, 2006, 12:21 PM #1
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    freewrite..

    juss a lil freewrite.. gettin back into the swing of things..

    on the highway to heaven..
    you can catch me at the 7 to eleven..
    clutchin a dutch to get me high way to the heavens..
    so you know that lex coupe you always speakin on..
    will be the same lex coop them birdsll leave you leakin on..
    without ya sneakers on..
    my boys keep it gritty..
    and they'll slide with ya bride if shes suttin pretty..
    so you can walk around look sure sporty and nice..
    but trust me, if i were you, id leave like 4 40s on ice..
    cuz i play no games, i say no names..
    my payroll gains my claim to fame..
    im insane in the brain with pain in my veins..
    and my man dko got that bomb cocaine to blow you up like propane..

    leave replies, ill return the favor..
  2. May 11th, 2006, 02:04 PM #2
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    This was really bad man, it had flow going for it and that's it. The content was just played out and unoriginal, aswell as extremely brief. This actually would probally be more suited for a cypher drop being as it isn't even 16 lines. This was just a bland self rep track, which doesnt even work because you started on an entirely different note and slid into this gangstah gangstah bull shit. Didn't like it man. Also, you need to leave two links to pieces youve replied to when you post a drop of your own otherwise the mods with close it.

    I'd apreciate it if you could reply to the Abstanti collab:
    "Poemicoriginate"
    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=291509
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  3. May 11th, 2006, 03:35 PM #3
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    This was really bad man, it had flow going for it and that's it. The content was just played out and unoriginal, aswell as extremely brief. This actually would probally be more suited for a cypher drop being as it isn't even 16 lines. This was just a bland self rep track, which doesnt even work because you started on an entirely different note and slid into this gangstah gangstah bull shit. Didn't like it man. Also, you need to leave two links to pieces youve replied to when you post a drop of your own otherwise the mods with close it.

    ^ word.... this was very bad and this wasnt all that interesting and overall it had no point..lack of complexity, good rhymes and flow...this was just bad man..just elevate and accually try to make a peice with a descent topic, thats my advice to you..peace~
  4. May 11th, 2006, 03:35 PM #4
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    Uhh this is the problem with these peoples on rapbattles now..
    Open Mic is Open Mic.. And I'm not saying this was the nicest piece, by far its not, but maybe you should critique a lil more instead of juss straight hatin..
    I'm back after a 4 year break doggie..

    I was nice enough to respond to your piece.. I am a man of my word..

    Dont close this, here are your two links Mr. Mods..

    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=291509
    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?p=4439510

    Where's Listen and D-Flow at ?
  5. May 11th, 2006, 04:04 PM #5
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    Its not hating man, you're supposed to take these critisisms and correct the error for next time. I encourage you to grow as a writer, hence pointing out all of the flaws.
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  6. May 11th, 2006, 04:27 PM #6
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    this was alright for wat it was it could of had a lil more punches in it though. it flowed quite nicely. I no wat you mean about the OM forum now its just about dpressing stories theres not really much happyness anymore its just stories i thought this was aiight keep postin ya shit

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  7. May 11th, 2006, 04:59 PM #7
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    needs extreme elevation....everything about this piece was elementary....your rhyme scheme and wordplay had no complexity what so ever....this whole piece needs elevation....you had a rhyme scheme but it wasnt complex at all....you need to use some multis and shit...keep practicin.....keep elevatin and droppin.~1~


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  8. May 11th, 2006, 10:45 PM #8
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    Good Looks.. Yo Self I Aint Tryina Beef Or Nuttin Knaimean I'm Juss Sayin.. Things Used To Be Different Around Here A Couple Years Ago.. But Good Looks For All The Replies.. Drop Some Links, I'll Be Sure To Respond When I Get Time.. This Was A Keystyle To Speak In Internet Jargon..
  9. May 11th, 2006, 11:09 PM #9
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    lol im from 03 on RB and thing are still the same this piece was bad i free wrote a 25 line om and it wasn't half bad so i came in here thinking the sam but dude this was playeeeeeeeeeed out the topic and overall jus palyed u lack basic writting techniques no hate jus critisism
  10. May 13th, 2006, 12:03 AM #10
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    ^^ Battle Me.

    When I First Started Posting Here In 01 Things Were Different
    Who The Fuck Are You ?
    I Stopped Posting Here For A While And Moved To HHT
    Then I Stopped Posting For 3 Years.. This Was A Freewrite As Well Doggie..
    If I Sat Down To Write A Piece Best Believe Its Going To Have At Least 2 16s
    Last edited by Ea$y; May 13th, 2006 at 12:06 AM
  11. May 13th, 2006, 03:28 AM #11
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    obviously ur a noob u can't even take critisim herb chill out write better next time cause this was wack
  12. May 13th, 2006, 06:36 PM #12
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    Noob ? You Pussy..

    I Been Doin This For Years Kiddo.. And I Can Take Critism, I Dont Tolerate Hate..

    Come On MR INTERNET VET With 35 More Posts Than Me..
    If You Think You Got Suttin Better Than Me, We Can Go Topical

    Pussy..

    Get At Me.. Ea$y...
  13. May 13th, 2006, 09:18 PM #13
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    yea man...you rreally need to elevate.....
    topic was blah..not a real topic......
    rhymes were descent i guess....too simple
    no multies...should elevate on that...
    flow was aight overall could be better
    and overall work on complexity.....
    keep elevating man..peace~
  14. May 14th, 2006, 07:20 PM #14
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    Good Looks For Real Replies..

    Bout To Have Time To Actually
    Write A Piece To Put Up In Here..

    School Sucks..
  15. May 14th, 2006, 07:23 PM #15
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    it was kinda simple but keep dropin shit and keep elevating fuck the haters
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