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    The Un explained Feeling Of A Love Story.

    The Un explained Feeling Of A Love Story.

    The meeting
    My life meaningless, with out her
    heart beating from in her breast…
    Forsaken stress, the reason my
    souls distressed weeping from chest…
    The very apparition of life, lies in
    her eyes thus lighting mine alike.
    She was distressed, blessed with
    beauty leathered in a weathered red dress…
    As she approached I noticed,
    the elegance that was ever
    evident, a realised…As I see
    her eyes, she was a wondering
    star endeavoured with-in stormy skies…
    Hard times, was clear, fresh,
    in a mesh of subtle life less,
    resided in her life yes…
    I thought to myself, as I
    placed a my hand in her grasp,
    as to welcome her past…
    I gently asked, why are you
    eyes tinted with a haze, a
    shade a pain, as she wept...
    I held in my clasp as she
    gasped and retracted her step,
    closer she came closer…
    A vivid image of a sedative
    Smile, upon loves painted poster
    Upon the final moment of depart
    a number exchanged, to palm…
    Calm yet seductive embrace,
    a silent charm of femme fatals face…
    The intricate thoughts provoked
    that night, of clarity bright
    on that mind flight
    Aroused my attention to
    relentlessly make contact,
    surely it would feel right ?



    First date
    Led away by A heart of stone,
    or as it seemed tantalised
    by distorted dreams away
    Life is a mere dream, a fleeting shadow on a
    cloudy day, as I loudly unfold
    The silence was a blood-curdling scream
    Of anguish, set out to break my soul
    Suddenly, silence broke
    Laughter of tension was spoke…
    Entrapped in each other eyes
    As a smile slowly awoke
    Cloaked, masked in fate
    Wine surrendered to the cup
    The sculpting of our first date.


    3 years down the line
    Apple of my eye, wine bleeds dry…
    Cries as apathy whispers it’s last goodbye
    Engulfed in love of another,
    She leaves her coat hindering on the floor…
    I wince perilously as she greats
    A meeting with the wood chipped door…
    Redundant to falcate, rotation of
    Pondering hearts awaiting tomorrow…
    As I fell to the floor, hand held my
    Heart full of borrowed sorrow
    Fatigue in my motion of commotion,
    I lay curled in a whirl of pain…
    As tender lacks slender, my eyes began
    To uncontroably rain, pain
    Caught up in emotion though lost
    In the sands of time does gather…
    But would I rather, die alone or paint a canvas
    In which I sit high on an alumni throne
    Divorced of-course from horse drawn carriage…
    The vital, final, spinal tearing
    Serronades a failure in marriage.
    AI


    “¡Viva la Revolución!”

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    There weren't many replies right away just cuz its long. But for me, it was worth the read. Some pretty good stuff and well put together. It's unseemingly complex in its own way and it was a good piece. You have a unique writing style and I like it. Though my favorite by you would be "A Writer's Pain," (because it's more complex and has some of the best metaphors and overall originality) this is also a pretty good piece. Keep writing!

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