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Thread: A Man Walks In The Street..............but Has A Soul........

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    A Man Walks In The Street..............but Has A Soul........

    a Man Walks In The Street, Deaf To The Beat,
    Violance Runs The Streets, Gangsters Dance To The Beat,
    He Still Continues To Walk,
    Can This Be,
    He Turns The Corner,
    Then Gets Beat,
    They Call Him Punk, They Call HiM Wimp,
    He Staggers Up,
    Then Starts To Walk With A Limp,
    They Say Stay Down, They Claim He'll Die,
    He Turns To Them, And Says Goodbye,
    They Pull A Knife,
    They Want His Life,
    He Cannot Run, He Cannot Hide,
    They Say Where You From, Who You With,
    Where You Goin You Little Bitch,
    He Says He Is In No Gang,
    But They Dont Buy What He Said,
    They Say Why Did You Not Coward Then,
    Why Stand Up And Face Us Men,
    He Turns To Them And Blood in His Mouth Says,
    Because I Have A Soul...................and You Lost Yours.....a Long Time Ago.................
    Last edited by RhymeSwift; April 17th, 2006 at 12:51 PM

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    uppin for some comments.......................................... ..............................................

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    ah...not a bad twist for the ending...i like that...some speech structure a little elementary....

    the end is what hits me tho...nice

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    thanks......................that was cool................i know it waas basic....but somtimes its the basic shit that gets the catch of the day..ya know what i mean?>p-e-a-c-e

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    I didn't care for the title. The end was the strong point. The guy saying 'Goodbye' seems put in only to fit the rhyme. 'Beat' was a bit overused in the beginning. Rewriting this without rhyme, would do the poem good.

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