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    Aint NO Sunshine

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    Wintry storm licking my temples, frostbites the mantle… goose pimples
    I shudder… tremble… assemble my mental notion on loose principles
    Morals hardboiled in the melting pot, still seeing hazard I fail to stop
    this rot that decays flesh with a rage, ill being a bastard, hell the plot…
    got twisted at birth, I wasn’t born in a hospice just tossed to Earth
    ………………………………………………………………………minus love
    Exiled from Eden like that Satan kid, landed on my crux…
    ………………ear-splitting, spitting FUCKS YOU to the skies above

    Eyes flicker sleepy; I crave radiance, for my dark cave is creepy
    Knee-deep piss through my khakis soaked grossly with faeces
    By creed, I’m not religious, don’t dig superstition or illusion
    Indeed, mostly frozen when it comes to exposing emotion
    Still my heart ticks, at least with a minimalist will to exist
    I dream vis-à-vis fields of bliss as Sunkist sands fulfil this wish
    But once awoken my delusion is broken by cloudy perplexity
    Life’s testing me, I face reality upon exodus from ecstasy
    Losing the vision, straying off subject, aborting my mission
    Unyielding of wisdom, moving mid darkness refusing to listen

    With intention.., I pray hard
    Hail seven angels of the heavens to safeguard
    Lift my soul from this abyss
    Abysmal chronicle, its short-form is deep shit
    Does God desert my dispute?
    Or, am I just too blind to apprehend his truth?
    ...…I balance life’s averages
    And decide existence is rampant with savages
    Contradicting my own views
    I alone choose coercion as a full-blown excuse
    ...Justifying my lack of trying
    Effortlessly enticed….., losing track of the lying
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    Plots
    & shapes
    Make lots of
    Mortal mistakes
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    Glut
    Of shade
    A rut sunless
    Scavenger of light
    I’m stuck in this maze
    Blue flowers & grass roots shrivel beneath my shoeless feet
    New thought’s lay-bare, resembling ass & tits on a nudist beach
    I beseech warmth & reach forth the sky as it spills hailstones
    I slur speech & drone meekly shaking in my ever-chilled bones
    Supernova stays anonymous; the old moon dulls as logic folds
    Even though death spreads like mould in a forest of toxic toads
    No saint, I’ve done crimes, abominations alas that taint my mind
    I paint cold glum rhymes, since in my life there aint no sunshine

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    uhm???????

    up!

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    i loved the multies wordplay vocab all that shyt was str8 hot piece the topic caught me i was thinkin about that song but this was totally different..... complex verse

    Wintry storm licking my temples, frostbites the mantle… goose pimples
    I shudder… tremble… assemble my mental notion on loose principles
    Morals hardboiled in the melting pot, still seeing hazard I fail to stop
    this rot that decays flesh with a rage, ill being a bastard, hell the plot…
    got twisted at birth, I wasn’t born in a hospice just tossed to Earth

    I
    Jot
    Plots
    & shapes
    Make lots of
    Mortal mistakes
    A
    Glut
    Of shade
    A rut sunless
    Scavenger of light
    I’m stuck in this maze



    ^^^^ favorite lines loved em keep it up pa
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    yeah thanx ma

    wrote it as my 1st topic league verse in SS

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    thaz whaz go0od drop some feed on mah OM suicide letter

    herez da link-

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=283539
    scytsophrenia

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    Nice man, realy loved it. Keep up the good work. I liked many of you lines and the rhyming was great.

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    safe

    any feeds...

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    wow really dont ever read your pieces but this was for sure pretty cool nice style and emotion given nice original rhyme scheme and story given glad to see you in SS i didnt no about your work at first but you have really grown in the past months from the first verse i saw from you stay up

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    Yeah this was a good piece, stadard issue from ma dog here lol......multies as usual were in a class of their own and that lil shape thing was visually good. I liked the complexity and the braod range of vocabulary.....i reckon you got a good chance in SS ma dog, just keep it poppin'
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    yo dawg. nice multi's,wordplay,vocab, an imagey. it flowed very well an it kept my attention the whole time. you just keep comin wit hot shit dawg. an let me know when you get our collab done. just pm me aight. peace out dawg

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    this my boo.......guess who it is

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    nice imagery and multies.i like your word choice.it all flowed well together.overall this was dope.

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    fams since day 1 you been wrtiting good, i give you much respect. you had a nice smooth verse overall. i felt the flow fams , also the multies fit right in the verse. good vocabulary, also the structure was okay, but it was kind of easy to read. but this piece had very good imagry, real deep details. good drop fams.....

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