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    Guardian of Domination

    Guardian of Damnation.................

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    MetaSin=Wheat



    Loney souls struggle across the planes of scorched terraines
    Dragged by their faces through fire and sulphur rain
    Crushing flames held by chains in the form of 50 dragons
    The Guardian of damnation - withered spirits whimper fearing the chasm
    Souls cling to the ribs and bones of their coprses
    Frightened to abondon the flesh - feeling remorse's
    A Beast creeps the earth with words of evil tydings
    For these streets submerge in dirt - They seek asylum
    Jagged blades plunged deep in the viens of pagan angels
    Rage of the tortued gorgan who was raised on satans table
    Twins of terrorism were the demonds of cane and able
    Racial fables told by their mother who shaked their cradle
    Ungovernable savages
    Floating on a fortress anchored between undiscovered passages
    Reciting with blasphamist's - Recieving the creed of kabbalist's
    Scriptures of the wicked - death on the wishlist
    My toungue wages war on political wizards

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    Sacrifice the last of nights to the average price,my savage life
    may I in fact dispite...that...thats not right,so pass the mic
    even bum's with lupis on the political move being toothless
    several movments,of lyrical recruitments,so fourth we are ruthless
    so here the truth is,the fierce troopers in spared moments
    death promised to exconvicts,numbers on top of number like exponets
    slept in slumber,domination under,as it's pretector of lyrical hunger
    concluding he wept then thunder,and lightning striked in summer,
    The exciment,enlightened,him to keep writing,and stop the fighting
    tension rising,not suprsing,of the pretection of a pricless diamond
    often frieghtened,because he was slowly but surely to be played
    The gates were pearly,natures purely,thinking it's way too early to be slayed



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    thats link 1

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    okay up this don't sleep we both did our verses in less than 10 mins so please what do you think yall?

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    upping.............

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    nice drop!
    i was feelin the concept
    n both of you got paid on ya w/p

    the ill verses
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    Good shit man. You both had a good flow and i was digging the conecpt of it all. Considering you both did your shit in 10 minutes this was tight man. both yall keep dis shit coming.

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    thanx yall...........

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    leave links... and i'll get bak to it

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    yo tht shit was tight respect!

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    you have to leave more feed than that^^^
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    Hmmmm..

    It was cool...I said it in some other feed I left, and I'ma say it again...Its dope if you like that sort of thing, I'm not no topical writer/poet...whatever you wanna call it, and deep writing really aint my thing, so I cant leave to much feed...

    creatively the vocab and expression of your lines was really good Metasin, from a creative point of view, Ghost wasnt as on point as meta, but still...I cant fault the nigga for what he wrote...

    It was a complex peice, and even tho I aint into this sort of thing, I actually kinda enjoyed reain this, so keep it up yall...

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    yo i guess it wuzz ight

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    Loney souls struggle across the planes of scorched terraines
    Dragged by their faces through fire and sulphur rain
    Crushing flames held by chains in the form of 50 dragons
    The Guardian of damnation - withered spirits whimper fearing the chasm


    nice ... imagery was cool fosho.. flow is on..vocab was on..was a good verse..only marred slightly by those couple semmingly stretched lines which threw the format off a lil



    bum's with lupis on the political move being toothless
    several movments,of lyrical recruitments,so fourth we are ruthless

    slept in slumber,domination under,as it's pretector of lyrical hunger
    concluding he wept then thunder,and lightning striked in summer,


    nice...vivid desciptions fosho

    creativity was dope in this piece overall.. could of had a litle more to it as a complete piece..
    like maybe a couple of hooks or an interlude of some sort

    had lots of good rhyming skills throughout... and both worked well together on the whole and dlivered the joint on point

    stay poppin
    pz1

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