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    Apocalypse Now

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    Apocalypse Now

    Travel with me on my thought train; dive in this dark subway of misdeed
    The sharpshooter speaking to the point, spikes making my soft lips bleed
    Pick your nose & study the bogey, see the same dust we was made from
    I didn’t develop-from a monkey… gracious God created Us in clay form
    Hence, he breathed life unto each soul, science of beauty, deep to behold
    My blood is a river of nectar sent since paradise… a magic potion stirred
    I preach poetry like the prophet Jeremiah, prose laced with potent words
    What is it worth to gain the Earth & perish midst the synagogue of Satan?
    Warfare disturbs divine motion, carnage strikes prior dialogue debating
    Laws of his tongue are ignored, so the Lord holds a two-pronged sword
    The wicked weaken in his wrath, fools falter for speaking bullish chaff
    Lost nation believing in witchcraft, flaming Angel’s smiting the riff-raff
    Fires & flames, who’ll reap the blame for all the Holy Messiahs slain?
    Who’ll admire his name? Heaven’s gates await only the pious & plain
    Only the highest obtain life eternal, I scribe in vain to write wise journal
    Sinners Hail Mary, pursue penance; the earthquakes at Eli’s entrance
    I surf against the tide in seven seas of gen trying to free my conscience

    The skies crack open with a carping thunder resonant for miles far flung
    Treetops & mountains offer shelter, Mother Nature protects her young
    I see global existence through a colourful spiral of spectral decadence
    Conspiracy theories remain unexplained if they lack factual evidence
    Largely this evidence is swept under rugs, or sedated by wonder drugs
    Civil war, populace control, genocide, media moguls deride it as myth
    Somebody’s hiding the culprit, got a scapegoat, scalpel at his throat rift
    Toxic roaches infest investments; leftover venison feed fed to peasants
    Life throws you lessons, curses quell Us; we rarely count true blessings


    Amen

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    Last edited by NiNjah Red; March 22nd, 2006 at 06:55 AM

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    yo nice piece, its got good vocabs, nice metaphores, the structure is nice, it flows nice, and i like it cuz i felt emotion in it. keep it up

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    ...nice topic , i loved how you stuk to it, it was very clear to read. The structure was understandable also, the flow was nice and smooth, the imagry had a good vision. it went fine with the good vocabulary, okay ryhme skeme also. but fams keep droppin art.

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    fosho sosho..

    thanx 4 da lookout

    up

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    ok nice drop abit to much to read (stretched) but when i did read it it was ight,, keep it up you got talent.

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    topic was great
    flow was great
    imagery was flawless
    vocab was intelligent
    structure was aight too
    overall nice peice ninjah keep blazin the keys stay up homie......1
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    Yo man i like this peice you had good structure and word play also it was easy to read and you didnt go of topic and shit. Nice job man.

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    bless

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    ==NiCe==

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    Quote Originally Posted by hazze
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    lolz

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