Hells what im living in...

[Krimm]

Its Krimm...man i gotta express myself...it feels like...i dunno...it feels like............this......

Sometimes i cant breath, somenights i cant sleep
Sometimes I cant seem, to find myself in reality
Sometimes i dont dream, sometimes i dont see
the light when its right infront of me, im one to be
the only person alive that dont quit feel like me
feels like im prisioned, locked up cause i aint free
but i aint worth money either, poor with no job
man i had a dream, but my visions are lost
cause i dont feel whole, my feelings are gone
i cut so deep but, it dont feel wrong
im so confused that , i dunno whats going on
simple to complex, i keep losing my thoughts
with me its like terrorism , cause it never stops
man im sick of living in , this world, im giving in
kinda feels like gods, not forgiving my sins
but man really i swear, im actually innocent
so please mr. devil, lucifer, satan...
dont take me, cause hells what im facein........

[reincarnation]

This shit was a nice piece, but I feel like you could have involved the reader or listener more with more vocabulary. Other then that whis was a nice piece jo.I would say add two more lines or a little more.

Good job jo.

[Poeta Demonio]

I liked it at the start of the read, but then slowly it slipped into just rap instead of good imagery and emotion, you need to realise that poetry is all about feeling, if you don't put enough feeling into your work an audience that knows about poetry will not apreciate it or even take the time to read all the way through... I see that you have potential though, so just keep writting.