Progress

[Kay-ZAR]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...91#post4137391

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...24#post4137524

niggas is like ..yo...u aint stop yet..
why would i stop? thats nonsense
if n e thing ima slo down the process
....in my mind rhymes progress.
i live in Ny and i aint from the projects
.im at LI
yall the type to get scared of bombthreat's ..
when i hold a mic my palm sweats
cuz im ready to kill niggas lyricaly in a contest
and if i dont kill u .physicaly.u will be left with scar'd flesh
u better duck when my arm strech
or u gona get caught with a hard left
god bless .
.......all my enimie's
im give'n yall foul's and penalty's
callin it like i was a referee
catchin felony's gettin put in pennetentary's
niggas pretended to be friends of me
fuck back in the day...fuck all those memory's
i wana be the one u hate...thats the only way u'll remember me
written to "i came to bring the pain" tupac's melody

[da king01]

bit too basic dude,you had some nice rhymes,your structure is something that you need to work on.the Gangster theme is played as fuck.....try to think of something,the title of this OM is good,but it doesn't really fit in with what you dropped,but keep on dropping,I see potential.

[r!PpER]

try to get a more orderly structure and work on some vocabs, multies and mets, then u be good, otherwise not bad for a start