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    The Wrongs of Africa Pt. 2

    The Wrongs of Africa Part 2



    Offspring of love divine, Humanity...
    To who, his eldest born, the Eternal gave
    Dominion over the heart; and taught to touch
    Its varied stops in sweetest unison;
    And strike the string that from a kindred breast
    Responsive vibrates! from the noisy haunts...
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    Of mercantile confusion, where the voice becomes a prayer,
    It is over-heard from the blaring meretricious glare
    Of crowded theatres, where in the cheerless place,
    Sits Sensibility, our watery eyes meet numbers of unlightened faces,
    Dropping over fancied woes her useless tear was still,
    "Come here, sit and weep with me; our substantial ills;
    Torn from their natal shore, and doomed to bear unloving weather,
    The breeze was cool as the ocean, sand was light as feathers
    Sustain. Nor vainly let our sorrowed blood flow and stain,
    Nor let the strong emotion make us cry and rise in vain
    But may the kind contagion widely spread throughout the part,
    Till in its flame we see the prize, the unrelenting heart
    One bright blaze of sparks, the core of universal love,
    Gone in grateful incense, rises up to heaven above
    Formed with the same capacity of pain, cuts cleanse with salty seas,
    The same desire of pleasure, delight, joy, and of ease
    Why feels not man for man? When nature shrinks we vanish,
    If Mother Nature returns to our land, she will be immediatley bannished

    From the slight puncture of an insect's sting, no more nightmares or crime,
    Faints if not screened from sultry suns, medicine leaves and pines
    Beneath the hardship of an hour's delay, we swim out to sea,
    Of needful nutriment and relaxation; when liberty...
    Is prized so dearly, that the slightest breath can shade the day,
    That ruffles but her mantle, the people can now awake
    To arms, unwarlike nations, that can begin the rain,
    Confederate states to vindicate and indicate her torrid claims
    Why shall the suffering man, follow his nearing doom,
    To ills he mourns, or spurns at? flowers with stripes that bloom
    His quivering flesh; with hunger and with thirst and drinks oil,
    Waste his emaciate frame?............... in ceaseless toils
    Exhaust his vital powers; and bind his limbs 'til they're warm,
    In galling chains and shackles?, shall he whose fragile form
    Demands continual blessings, to support the poor and rude,
    Its complicated texture; air, water and the food
    To ask those mercies, whilst his selfish aim of remorse,
    Arrests the general freedom while their sleepin' during the force?

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    Up for anyone?

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    okay i was loving this concept then a mofo shit was ill as hell the rhymesceme was hot i was loving how you has your imaginary get in this peice the picture made the whole thing stand out.You stayed on Topic the whole verse the beginning was kinda coo liked this vocab was on point big words real complexity good shit though suprised this is getting slepted on pz

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    Thanks man.

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    i def liked dis piece, @ 1st i thought dat maybe dis belonged wit da poetry (ur 1st few lines) but then it was like ur rhyme scheme picked up & dis shit got hot
    i def liked ur 1st lines tho, so don't get me wrong...u used da picture & dat really helped 2 build ur imagery up--props
    def keep postin cuz i liked dis alot--1
    -LL

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    Thanks gal.

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    Whoa @ being slept on!!

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    um ok.

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