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Thread: Part 1: My Utopia

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    Part 1: My Utopia

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=270539
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=268212
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    Dwelling upon nimbus clouds, poking at tornados with my scepter,
    Ordering divine servants while feasting on ambrosia and nectar,
    Entertained by Hell's Jesters as a single juggle controls your fate,
    Making an exaggerated entrance to smite protesters at The Gate,
    Keep the wisdom flowing; I'm Scared of the narrow minded class,
    So I keep a local Library so intelligence doesn't smolder into ash,
    Passing Jack and Jill tipping my crown handing them a pail,
    Pouring soda in my cup licking the foam off the Holy Grail,
    Greeting Romans on the Rooftop Garden where children play,
    Walking up the Stairway to Heaven, high 5'ing Jesus on the way,
    Erotic rhythms rock the floor as I put my head to the ground,
    Exotic dancing with Mother Earth with a rose in my mouth,
    I talk to doves in the trees so please there’s no need to panic,
    Staring upon the mortals laying face down on my hammock,
    I vowed to keep the mind growing with stanzas spoken aloud,
    Stroking my feather pen along the canvas built in the clouds,
    Trading echoes with the mountain and dancing on top of fog,
    Listening to the croaks chillin’ with swamp toads on a log,
    I spend my thinking time underwater next to my treasure chest,
    Talking to Mermaids about the meaning of life when I’m stressed,
    Watching the greener grass on the other side as I float,
    Meditating on the Himalayas stoking the fur of my goats,
    I can tell how close to home I am by the way the wind blows,
    Chillin’ at the palace playin’ strip poker with Circe and Calypso,
    ..I glide amongst cranes flocking together as they teach,
    Sitting lost in the sands of time drawing sun dials on the beach.

    Appreciate some feedback..
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    I can tell how close to home I am by the way the wind blows,
    Chillin’ at the palace playin’ strip poker with Circe and Calypso.
    -Vulcan.

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    it had a tyte flo...the topic wasn't what u normally xpect so dat was str8 2
    i liked ur vocab, it kept if fairly simple but u elev. with the meaning of the piece
    the struc. was ez 2 follow which was nice cuz sum of these getz 2 hard 2 get in2
    props overall & keep postin

    Return the feed if u gotz the chance, i'd really appreciate it--Gracias!

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    Thank you for the reply..
    Uppin'..
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    I can tell how close to home I am by the way the wind blows,
    Chillin’ at the palace playin’ strip poker with Circe and Calypso.
    -Vulcan.

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    This is a good rap

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    Quote Originally Posted by Nexus
    This is a good rap

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    I can tell how close to home I am by the way the wind blows,
    Chillin’ at the palace playin’ strip poker with Circe and Calypso.
    -Vulcan.

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    I can tell how close to home I am by the way the wind blows,
    Chillin’ at the palace playin’ strip poker with Circe and Calypso.
    -Vulcan.

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    You're new to the site so i'll give you some advice about the rules. The next time you leave links go into more detail in your replies. talk about the topic, imagery and vocab used, multi's etc. I'd be tempted to close this if you weren't brand new.

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