Bad Boy-------

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I'm A Bad boy but I aint never signed to PUFF
I got lines to sell and lime to Puff
You talk shit around ya boys just rhyming TUFF
cars and diamond and all that designer stuff

Flow is like dope herion to the veins
similar to weed only dro I spit flame
fie that shit
all the huff niggas blow I can't believe ya buy that shit
this aint mixed it's 100% man
cop them bricks
Change ripp 1 16 ya cop the disk
this real flow and I ain't gotta watch my wrist
When I go pop it wont be the shots from 5ths
duplicating the flow niggas try and watch my lips
yet it only hurts more when you watch the whip
they same i'm something like a cane how I roll with crips
like the Jigga of the Chi minus the swoeln lips
I'm the worker on the mic you'll get rolled and flipped
Numero Uno you'll get reversed and skipped
since grammer school I 've been to bad to take the trip
cotton mouth flow nigga cause I always spit

I'm A Bad boy but I aint never signed to PUFF
I got lines to sell and lime to Puff
You talk shit around ya boys just rhyming TUFF
cars and diamond and all that designer stuff

I'm living in a realistic Matrix
where the power of the dollar a have ya name engraved in the pavement
A minute to get hit for it ya whole life to save it
the root of all evil the greatest
In a land where the misfortunate are mistaken
a tilted hat mean gang affailation
it's a set up it was there's for the taken
the block hot and you'll niggas fried like bacon
My manipulative thoughts had me sliding off skaten
some niggas a sell out like tigger did the basement
no comment no statment
wanna hit my hoes got to peal off faces
took thee sprewell's off kid cause I'm back to the basics
no jewelry no glitter in my name stop payment
no advance can't spend it 4 I make it
stacking everything cause you gotta be patient

I'm A Bad boy but I aint never signed to PUFF
I got lines to sell and lime to Puff
You talk shit around ya boys just rhyming TUFF
cars and diamond and all that designer stuff

Not only do I see the game man I damn near taste it
got several 16's worth all you'll braclets
produce a double disk 1 for ya car and 4 ya necklace
Change come wrecklace when you gone face it
it is not I demanding respect
it is the flow so gracious
contagious as a sinple cold
statments in codes nepolanic
tantics on mics
a turn a bitch to a hoe and make her a celebrity overnight
Change a smooth dude casual shoes over nikes
something like SPike
tryin show how to do the damn thing and do it right
ignite like either ans words of life blow out ya speaker
change the teacher reverand the flow i'm the preacher
take ya to Chuch play the usher and seat ya
delete ya over the radio I'll bleep ya if ya eager
my 16's won't jump you niggas they'll leap ya

I'm A Bad boy but I aint never signed to PUFF
I got lines to sell and lime to Puff
You talk shit around ya boys just rhyming TUFF
cars and diamond and all that designer stuff

[King Humble]

yeah not bad.. nice song form and flow was fine.. just the rhymes and rhyme scheme cudda been more varied you get me.. like a few too many lines all sort of rhemed on the same word too often... decent attempt at some sharp vocab i reckon...
just keep on working how to word yor lines best can be and work the rhyme scheme some mo yeah

pz1

[Considerably Ill]

The 23rd letter
The 1st letter
The 3rd letter
and the 11th letter

Put them 4 letters together and thats what your rhyme was

Just call it wack, if it was wack. And post constructive feedback or find yourself banned, you silly herb you.- Johnny 6-feet

[Johnny 6-feet]

The topic didn't draw me in, boast pieces have been done a million billion times in a million billion different ways. Originality will make you stand out here, so aim for it if you want recognition. You had decent multi's in here, which helped. You were boasting about gangsta/money type stuff for a song length which had me losing interest. Work on your vocab and pick a topic you can go into detail with next time.

Keep elavating, keep posting.

And post 2 links to 2 open mics you've replied to or this will get closed.

[EyeCandy]

The topic didn't draw me in, boast pieces have been done a million billion times in a million billion different ways. Originality will make you stand out here, so aim for it if you want recognition. You had decent multi's in here, which helped. You were boasting about gangsta/money type stuff for a song length which had me losing interest. Work on your vocab and pick a topic you can go into detail with next time.

Keep elavating, keep posting.

And post 2 links to 2 open mics you've replied to or this will get closed.

^^^word.. i agree wit johnny.. dis kinda shiit has been done alot.. so it aint gona interest tha reader.............. why??? cah its been done so many times.. next time write about something outstanding that will interest tha readers.. feel me... dis piece was aiite but like i said ^^^

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good look on the cretique's you'll just trying to get my skills up some...

[EyeCandy]

u wrote any other o.ms???

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No'll not yet but I basically brain storm and come up with shit it's like I have a hard time focusing on the topic.. I always seem to branch off from the main topic of disscusson.........It's not like writer's block it just not staying on the topic----

[EyeCandy]

i get cha stil.. sound like u dont be writing that often then... but yeah if ya wana collab or suttin jus hit me up k...

[P. Mortuus]

No'll not yet but I basically brain storm and come up with shit it's like I have a hard time focusing on the topic.. I always seem to branch off from the main topic of disscusson.........It's not like writer's block it just not staying on the topic----

I feel that shit sometimes.........When i think of something yet my ink rights something else......I usually just let my brain flow and right what i feel.....after a day i go back and re-read it and then correct my stuff.....This was aight dog, just wait for ya moment of inspiration.....somethin' will happen

Keep poppin'

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I really don't write that often...something I have to work on in the near future...
I don't have a problem with doing a collab with you someday

4-sho

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good look Pakaveli. that's good shit coming from a vet. much respect..

A and where do I go to learn to post links and all that extra shit?????????????????????

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[EyeCandy]

I really don't write that often...something I have to work on in the near future...
I don't have a problem with doing a collab with you someday

4-sho

aiite hun jus holla wen u down.....1

[P. Mortuus]

good look Pakaveli. that's good shit coming from a vet. much respect..

A and where do I go to learn to post links and all that extra shit?????????????????????

Just post the link like you would post a verse or comment, oh yeah
Laydee is actually more of a vet than me, i only been rhymin for 6/7 months

[EyeCandy]

Just post the link like you would post a verse or comment, oh yeah
Laydee is actually more of a vet than me, i only been rhymin for 6/7 months

i might be vet but chu got talent & u way better than me
i've seen ur shiit.. it ent nuffin compared 2 mine... its all good dow