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    The Wrongs of Africa.

    The Wrongs of Africa



    FAIR is this fertile spot, which God assign'd
    As man's terrestrial home; where every charm
    Attracts his unperverted sense, and fills
    His heart with gladness: to his raptur'd sight
    Th'extended landscape opens; chearful green
    Invests the lawn; luxuriant forests wave;
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    The crystal stream irriguous, ruptures the shole,
    And heaven's bright azure canopies the trees; whole
    Soft on his ear the voice of music scented of perfume,
    In grateful undulations: odors sweet while angelics bloom
    From herbs and trees, from flowers of varied hue,
    Pollute him, and in silent whispers bring unwanted spew
    The pleasing promise of the future year lies beneath the stars,
    Formed with a soul to relish all their desired charms
    Man, wanders over their beauties still unconfined,
    And lauds their Author: when some fiend becomes malign
    Over all the scene his blighting influence falls and sheds,
    And bids it sicken on the sated, related sense
    To loathing and disgust, and shall the sun gleam,
    Ever from the east his glorious course begins to come clean
    And not be blest by man? or that mild orb leaves,
    That rules the hours of night, and sooths to peace
    The tides of passion, hear the insulting voice,
    Of hopeless anguish, that perverse arraigns of common choice
    Her light, and bids her never more return?
    ——Yes——thanks to man, the scourge of all his kind will burn.
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    Has raised his bounded views beyond the scope,
    Of selfish pleasure, and immediate good, voices began to choke
    —Yes, thanks to man; whose follies, and whose crimes,
    Change the fair face of nature, where time climbs vines
    Her dearest gifts to evil: she breathes the air,
    Its healthful fragrance, his misguided rage seems in despair
    With foul contagion loads its dropping wings rested ground,
    Swept from the carnage of the reeking field: they headed down
    Over the broad ocean, whose encircling arms,
    Were meant to join the far land, where we gazed the stars
    In friendly intercourse, and wide diffuse God made them fall,
    The blessings of each call was different, state to all
    His mad ambition, sends in dreaded array,
    His messengers of terror; prompt to store the decayed
    Their fiery vengeance, on each distant shore,
    Whose natives to his absolute command, knees fell to the floor
    Their soil, their produce, liberties, and lives: waste,
    Resign not. He amidst the spicy climes while dirt was kicked in their face
    Of Africa, where prolific nature pours through the health
    it's unappropriate, how we sell the poor to the wealth.
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    Interesting read , piece..


    I had to read it twice because of your
    metaphor word selection. Kina confusing
    but from what I was reading I think I
    understand what message you were trying to
    bring across.


    "FAIR is this fertile spot, which God assign'd
    As man's terrestrial home; where every charm
    Attracts his unperverted sense, and fills
    His heart with gladness: to his raptur'd sight
    Th'extended landscape opens; chearful green
    Invests the lawn; luxuriant forests wave;"



    well just by reading what I quoted that God
    mad a beautiful earth and man basically destroyed
    it with his or her choices. And due to these choices
    other individuals such as slaves has suffer due to these
    choices...

    I could be wrong but that's what I got from this read.


    "Yes, thanks to man; whose follies, and whose crimes,
    Change the fair face of nature, where time climbs vines"

    These lines right hear somewhat indicate what I am
    talking about.



    Anyways nice use of wording I like a lot.
    Nice metaphors for sure and definitely nice
    vocabulary. Like that style.

    Nice structure nice topic and you went at the
    topic very well. Sorta unique using the picture.
    Nice and neat.


    nice drop..

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    Very deep and much needed. I'm glad that the first post I read on this site was your work. I agree whole hartedly with you. "the scoruge of all his kind WILL burn". It flowed nicely and the story brought me to the edge of my seat. I think that I have found a new home. Mind this...There are a lot of rappers out there. You are head and neck above them all...You are a Poet.
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    Thanks man, I appreciate it.

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    Yo. I have been needin' to hear some real shit for a hot minute now. I got my first post up. Let me know what's up I'd appreciate it comming from you.
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=264066

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    nice drop nost....deep peice the topic was a good choice.... peice flowed well.....the imagry was dope.... n like alway's u had very good vocab...i don't really have any thing bad to say..

    o yea keep it up

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=263516

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    another sick one nostradamus, deep piece comes along with a good topic, and it attracted my eys with an original name
    dope metaphors, nmost people prolly woulnd get the entire story without you incorporating your word usage with certain bars. excellent job also good vocabulary

    hit up "Racism" links in m sig

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    Thanks Percept, I really appreciate it. I'll be hitting urs in a sec.

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