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Last edited by Unwritten Hazard; August 20th, 2006 at 06:36 AM
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"I rap like no one out there can fuck with me"
i gave you honest feed, so be honest with me
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P.S. this was the last open mic i wrote, probably about 6 months old right now
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"I rap like no one out there can fuck with me"
i gave you honest feed, so be honest with me
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Bump
it got lost in the pile.
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"I rap like no one out there can fuck with me"
i gave you honest feed, so be honest with me
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you have too many good lines to qoute but..
.."and it feels awkward when she makes me rub her belly" <ahhh, 1 of the worst feelings on earth...damn you just gave me flashbacks.
you're opening line says a lot
liked the whole thing start to finish.
hope to see more post from you.
Yo this piece was sick, ur flow was on point all the way thru and u stayed wit the same rhymin technique allway thru. You vocab was nice wid bare multis and you stayed to the storyline well. Id giv it like a 8 or 9 outa 10.
Peace
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yeah this story flowed nice and easy.. i'd say maybe a bit stronger vocab here n there wudda lifted it more , but hey sa'll good... rhyme scheme was snazzy.. some off the heezy multies... had a few good poetic touches... structure was decent...
flow was steady....
good lil story for real
stay 1
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Let me get this straight, you've got the nerve to call my piece garbage and you come out with some shit like this? Chain Letter was a simple, dope boast piece, you tried to be original and came up short fucko. Your vocab was below average, your multi's were practically nonexistant, you subject matter was played and your imagery was uninteresting.
You fucking elavate, start throwing your balls around again and i will slap you down, kid.
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tried to be original?? kid, im not a net-head like you. this shit is actaully happening to me and im dealing with it as we speak....even if its played out, im an MC. and i write about shit i feel, and concepts that appeal to me.
just cause its been done alot ,it isnt gonna stop me from putting my emotions in text and sharing my side and what i think bout it.
you CHAIN MAIL GUYS needa get a clue, anyone cant write words down. but my shit is real, my shit people can actually relate too, my shit actually has meaing and a purpose behind it.
yall stuck on poetry shit and over stress the mechanics of writting, plus i got 30 more multis then your verse, you needa learn the definition cause you just look stupid.
your work should be a message you want to get across to people, not how pretty your verse looks.
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"I rap like no one out there can fuck with me"
i gave you honest feed, so be honest with me
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well to be honest i was feeling this a bit
it was a descent piece i liked it most because it seems
like something you actually going threw...........
plus you had a few nice lines that i know alot if
people can relate to...so i enjoyed reading it
peep my piece dont test chick
I was feelin the story having gone threw it myself. It flowed quite nicely, though it isn't my particular taste. It coudl be beefed up a little bit. But overall I think it is very good.
yea, now that ive expressed my opinion on that issue....
its time to drop that hot shit next.
but im glad you guys felt it.
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"I rap like no one out there can fuck with me"
i gave you honest feed, so be honest with me
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rhyme scheme was ok.....
vocab was meh
visual was meh
overall a ok peice at best
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=262736
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LMAO word^^^
all i see from you is givin feed about how shitty everyone else is...then come with shit...multies not there...flow..for he most part was ok but choppy in spots...vocab was elementary as well as ryhme scheme...played topic and the beginning didnt grab my attention and the endin didnt do it for me niether
overall 4/10...elevate
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does you net heads know what multis are??? lol imma about to post the definitio so you can educate yourselves....
well thanks for your feed...im sorry i didnt post a poem like everyone else
but have you guys ever touched a mic?
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"I rap like no one out there can fuck with me"
i gave you honest feed, so be honest with me
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yes i thouch mic all the time.....aswell as butt's...
but ummmmmmmm there is no mic here fam....it's the net....u have to convert it.......u'll get it one day............i hope
pz
keep elevating
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