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    Temples of Prejudice

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    -formally known as Revolutionary X

    This ladies and Gentlemen, is my portrayed story of surviving the many poisons that is, Racism. I grew into a hateful being but in the end, I understood my fellow man, he bled just like me. Numerous Vials of hate I had to live off of throughout my life, now I live with Vials of peace, and self knoweledge. Check the philosophy.

    Temples of Prejudice


    Scout the devils temples and corridors with many doors
    He sits on the throne of temptation, mockin' human warlords
    Sharpened swords pinned on damp brick walls, while grace falls
    Like sweat on human pores on course, souls venture without laws
    Shades of colors White, Black, and Brown blind folk with hate
    Souls who wanted true liberation inspiration, but got dealt by fate
    Klan robes and hoods and Pan-Afrikan flags reside in tombs
    Filled with nauseous fumes that corrode rooms with volumes
    Mixture of a race wars to fill the pages of a New Slavery lore
    Tortured souls who wanted no more pain, limbs and mind tore
    Black and Caucasian saints paint portraits of peace and reality
    Through the phases of love and understanding came this capacity
    Along with many others we prevailed, broke through satans cells
    Outside, grass was greener and slightly lively, heard freedoms bells
    Burnt ropes at gallows with my fellows of another color tint, time spent
    With them caused intelligence to expand with fellow man, check the print
    Far from propaganda and corrupted rights from miranda with dirtied badges
    My soul latches to co-existence that once kept distance from subsistence
    Now with assistance, we battle hate with many amounts of resistance.
    Last edited by Philosophy; December 30th, 2005 at 11:09 PM
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    Like it
    Flow waz nice vocab waz ok concept waz good and the wordplay waz good to make this better u need to make it longer
    But still ok
    CODE RED

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    Word. Thanks for the feed, uppin for some more opinions, advice on corrections..etc.
    With the tone of this, Notice...
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    Flow was nice....It was a decent overall Peice... Metaphors an Multis were decent....Vocabulary was big factor...There was alot of nice wordplay also used in this Writing. The opening was good along with the closing. Over all i liked the topic an the way you used your imagination an put it together. Keep your work coming.

    -Ethical

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    Much Love.
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