Deadly text

[Devils_Diamond]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=256868


Welcome to the killin sweepstakes/
chillin in each state willin' ta rob ya cheapskates/
ya lines I freebase, divine for my peeps sake/
I'll captivate you, like I have to hate you/
deactivate ya forces, then decapitate the corpses/
my minds a rhymin fortress, that outshines the line of porches/
im just a adolescent teen, an a phine for both green/
on the street scene, im known to keep clean/
rhyme and deafeat dreams, my mind is a discrete theme/
try ya hardest ya coun't come half as nice/
i blast the mic ta motha fuckin drastic heights/
kiss ya ass goodnight, cuz the mic is a scythe/
and I jack and slice, for the facts of life/
performin rituals like a sacrafice/
sending individuals to the afterlife/
I'll pull out the tool and clap em/
i dont care if there quadruple platinum/
only listen to rap fuck punk rock/
my funk drops korrupt cops/
and ya know i aint known to fight fair/
i'll get ya while ya sleep'n just like a nightmare/

ight been a while since i dropped show sum love RB

[Devils_Diamond]

still waiting on feed from anyone post ya thoughts

[tecneek]

its pretty tight it seems like something i would write
not the actual words the the rhymes style
like
``Welcome to the killin sweepstakes/
chillin in each state willin' ta rob ya cheapskates/
ya lines I freebase, divine for my peeps sake/

its pretty tight

[Devils_Diamond]

ight thanks for the feed man


uppin dis

[MADDUS]

gud multis, obviously you got ya own
rhyme scheme and flow works well with
it, some word play...but the multis were
the stand out in this piece,i didnt really
catch the concept, or theme...but if the
title sez anything, mihgt be to show skillz,
id suggest adding some vocab fam, just adds
fire...and some emotion, other than that
ya styles str8, good looks for the feed
on mines...im out...peace