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10 Min Check
20 Min Drop
House Rules
Blind Spit
G'luck
DEF Reaper
Dreams
10-20 Lines
10 Min Check
20 Min Drop
House Rules
Blind Spit
G'luck
HEY HOLD UP...CHECKIN IN....BUT I GOTTA TAKE A DEW DEW...
SO I'LL DROP WHEN IN GET bACK YO...DAMN I"LL KEY IT FUCK...
*runs to toilet*
Death to All Comers..
im checkin in Dreams cuase he writin his verse
checkin in and waking you up light
blaze you up hit your chest like a shot gun leave you high all night
there's only one thing i could say that could help ya
im gonna murder this shit is helta skelta
i put in a place you aint seen before
im knocking on your door you start wondering if your girl
is my whore
this dude is def he cant here probley thinks about
hermaprodites
because he's a slient queer
im gonna leave real quick ill slow down so i can
give you time to spit
Your "Dreams" I'm reality...causin bitches fatalities...
I'll knock you out with one hand...and get KO technicalities...
You can't battle me ur too weak...not in ur wildest "Dreams"
Cuz I'll come from outta nowhere and merk u behind the scenes...
Your a pussy ass wack rapper I seen ur type before...
Matter of fact I think it was you outside of the corner store...
You want more I'll give it to you, I don't even have to throw punches...
I could sit around and do push-ups...my dick in ur mouth while u do crunches...
You eat cum like lunches...you faggotty ass lame...
The only reason your popular now is because of Game...
They say sleep is the cousin of DEF...well guess what...?
My cousin is on vacation, so I'm here to merk you...tough luck
You suck, your wack please believe I speak the truth...
No confessions are necessary its written all over you...
Death to All Comers..
nice nice but do trust me go another round and ill eat you up like shirmp fried rice
I keyed that yo...I'll do some serious chronic damage if I really thought about it...
You don't want it...so go elevate...its the best advice I can give you...
Now vote people vote...
Death to All Comers..
Def rapper: man u gotta stopp it with the gay stuff, its too old and it dont hurt u gotta better ur vocab, dont understimate, if if ur battlin a baby, fuk him up hard, cuz u dont know wat the baBy could come up with, othe than that ur shit was pretty descent.
Dreams: u gotta be more creative man, u too stop with the gay shit and the gurl and wateva, write from ur heart and ur mind cuz, think of way to hurt ur opponent, think of ways to suprise ur opponent and amuse the audience.
for better wordin, punches and creativity(even though i didnt like that gay stuff ur wrote) V/ Def Rapper
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uppin 4 DEF Reaper..........
uppin' so that I can get some votes and maybe a win or somethin....
Death to All Comers..
Uppin for more votes............................................. .........................................
Somebody please hit up my battles...pulleasssse
Death to All Comers..
Uppin this battle for some feedback...come one peeps leave me somethin yo...
Death to All Comers..
k... even tho i cant vote, ill give u guys some feedback...
Dreams
checkin in and waking you up light
blaze you up hit your chest like a shot gun leave you high all night
there's only one thing i could say that could help ya
im gonna murder this shit is helta skelta
i put in a place you aint seen before
im knocking on your door you start wondering if your girl
is my whore
this dude is def he cant here probley thinks about
hermaprodites
because he's a slient queer
im gonna leave real quick ill slow down so i can
give you time to spit
dreams u got to fix ur flow.... let me show u the syllables in each of ur lines
1. 9/15
2. 12/12
3. 10/17 (6/11)- depends if u meant to put that door in the middle of that line
4. 15/7
5. i dont know wut u wer tryin to rhyme in ur first verse for this line
ok... try to get around the same amount of syllables for each line
also fix ur structure.... its real messy and its hard to know sometimes which lines ur tryin to rhyme
try doin this
Line A.......
Line B.......//
Line C.......
Line D.......//
and so on....
also work on ur vocab and try to come up wit better punches cuz thos r pretty simple and sometimes ur disses didnt make sence so try to make it more clear or if u hav to make a star like this* at the end of the line and explain it at the bottom
good luck with it.. hope u improve
DEF Reaper
u got the flow down and structure
i liked ur personals a lot.... the way u used dreams was real creative keep up wit that
k sometimes ur lines werent that good like:
Your a pussy ass wack rapper I seen ur type before...
Matter of fact I think it was you outside of the corner store...
You eat cum like lunches...you faggotty ass lame...
You want more I'll give it to you, I don't even have to throw punches...
I could sit around and do push-ups...my dick in ur mouth while u do crunches...
they werent that bad but i know u can do better than thos
but some lines i thot wer pretty hot:
The only reason your popular now is because of Game...
They say sleep is the cousin of DEF...well guess what...?
My cousin is on vacation, so I'm here to merk you...tough luck -wut i liked bout this line is the wordplay in it.... cousin of DEF... creative...
there wer others too....
well ur drop was pretty good and if u say its a keyed it then id luv to see wen u focus in... pretty nice
Overall id give it to DEF Reaper... jus work on it Dreams ull get better
Reason: jus everythin was betta by reaper
v/ Def Reaper
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yo could u guys check this battle out and vote....thanks...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=248450
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def reaper owned this in every aspect..
flow
punches
opener
clsoer
wordplay..
everything
vote def
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