check dis freestyle out

[D rOcK]

Aight here goes tell me wut u think.....

Yo imma take u to da skool of rap
Ma muney like a klondike, wut wud u do for dat
So take a seat and learn a lesson
I teach u bout ma hustla proffesion
You wanna learn about mathematic
I show u how I do my numbas off dem automatics
In chemistry I show u how to cool dat coke
Now back to math, u plus a deal means broke
Now movin on to physics, I take u all on a visit
Defy tha rules of gravity
Put a hollow in ur cavity
Fuck forensic, u jus livin is a mystery
Fuck social studies son u alredy history
I give u criminal lessons thru a subliminal message
Who cares about gym u kno imma be late
And wen I get there I creamate ur teamate

Just a lil sumthin I wrote in class wen I wuznt learnin lol
Hit me up witt sum feedback ya dig

I don't need a stunt duble I stunt duble

[D rOcK]

The 7th line is supposed to go like dis:
In chemistry I show u how to cook that coke

I wrote cool instead of cook my fault

[Alphabetized]

yo u need to really up the vocab and flow ur shit
was really basic, it was an alright freestyle
id give u around an 6/10

[el gallo negro]

up ur vocab infact up everything elevate

[jake]

,,Man this was wack,weak and basic...i give you bout 2/10...ya should get some practice in before droppin these OM aight??...1

[Intense It E]

uhhhhh it's ok I mean it's ok if you JUST started rappin. I can see you just got on the site but I mean before you start ya know boastin ya shit, look at other people shit and get an idea of the vocab and shit that works on this site. You need vocab/flow/and all that good shit.

[Tripz5]

eh imma keep it real with u.. shyt was ass yo... thas not ur style of rappin.. play around with shyt n figure out ya style.. vocab and punches wordplay aint evrything.. but u need a flow... so start off workin with ur flow...

[iceberg]

this is gonna be closed but it was good

[$treet $cholar]

i be doin da same shyt in class
i go to school to sit down wit a pen and pad to write my lyrics

[iceberg]

yea i do that to

[Johnny 6-feet]

Closed. Read the rules.