why was I chosen.....True story & very disturbing

[Britty D]

Why was I chosen to get the abuse
Why was I chosen to have to hang with guilt

Why was I Chosen to be only six
Why was I Chosen to have to suck his dick

Why was I Chosen not to be saved
Why was I Chosen to hurt everyday

Why was he chosen to be my uncle
Why was he chosen to be my mom brother

Why was he chosen to have 5 daughters
Why was he chosen to molest each on of em

Why was he chosen to be in jail
Why was he chosen to rot in hell

[Britty D]

Please Give Me Some Feed Back

[young hov]

straigh but could of use better wordplay vocab and structure be creative next time this was to simple ................keep elavating

[~ladie_streetz~]

this was okay
but you need to work on your formation of your peom
the vocab needs to be more creative as well as emotion. not saying this wasn't serious but you needed to add more emotion to this so that everyone can feel this when they read it. if you want to rhymes you poem, make the rhymes more decent than basic coming as well

[Britty D]

Yo Say Somethin

[Tourniquet]

Written badly, with nil emotion.

[Spoken]

you could use this type of poem as a starter to a better poem, you need to develop onto it. Try adding more emotion, more imagery and make it a bit more expressive, you need to definitly add some feeling to it. use this as a draft and add onto it.

Peace
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