how bout no!?!
how bout no!?!
Last edited by This Aint Beef; December 22nd, 2006 at 03:35 PM
.................... the feeling of rejection
:cry:
Maybe I shouldve kept this in the shadows.......
no one has anything to say??
well i dont think you shold keep it in the shadows ppl are slow at gettin replies out theses
days it was a short yet nicely written piece i think you may have been able to elaborate on some of the key words a bit to maybe extend the message to the reader but thats okay its still good
thanks and peep beaten by your words for me
I thought that this was a nice drop. I liked the rhyme scheme that it had although they can become boring easy it was nice because you kept it suttle. The flow was smooth & it helped the piece out. I feel that the vocab although there wasnt very much of it that what you did was nice. The ending was cluttered though for some reason the last 3 lines didnt sounds right. But I dont know maybe its just me.
Thnx yall... Got a link for me HaZy??... Dont freepost yellaboy...
Mo feed would be appreciated.
yo that was sweet I liked it And I believe everyone has felt that way on day in there life Im like it
DANGER RANGED
Thnx yo... Any feed left in this one??
iight... last up
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