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    Killed My Belief

    Killed My Belief



    Like a strike of a match, my belief started and demised/
    My belief was so powerful, its power had totally defied/
    Actually, what had ended it was a very big influence/
    But, by its actions later, became a great nuisance/
    Love, and respect is what I had felt for it before/
    Though the emotions quickly fell like the life Caesar/
    How did it come to this? My hatred began so quick/
    It just makes me sick, to think of before how rich/
    My life was, suddenly I was tortured to the greatest/
    Even more than my poverty, and people being racist/
    It hurt on the inside and boldy was shown on the out/
    Life after religion is what this piece is completly about/
    HE made me lose my faith, and of all things HIM/
    That was the start though me hating him was my first sin/
    Just by realizing what he does, how he playes with us/
    All of you people saying, he kills? whats the big fuss?/
    He made this world, he should protect it not destroy/
    I realized to him, all of us are just old worthless toys/
    When he first got us, we were fun very entertaining/
    But he grew bored, decided to destroy the remaining/
    That just murdered my faith, his un-justified actions/
    To think families try to survive on such little rations/
    But, he doesn't care while killing people and my belief/
    Nothing we can do, because that step is just to steep/
    His brain is his sniper, looks at a victim and just nods/
    The person that killed my belief, would have to be GOD/





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    Actually, this was an aiight drop... Some word usage could have differed to make this piece flow a little better, but this was descent. It had enough vocab to keep my interest throughout this piece...

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    i didnt love your delivery but iloveed your idea it takes bravery to attack this subject in the manner you have it came out very well.
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    good job homie, i as feelin the topic
    the vocab was not half bad
    the flow was cool
    and it was eazyto read
    8/10

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    thanks for the feed...........

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