~TeLeViSeD MinDz~

[ArcherPriest]

Yo Yo

Here's a story bout some 'Friends', they went out on a 'Blind Date'
They got 'Lost'.. and were later found drown in 'Ricki Lake'
'Perry Mason' took the case and called up 'Magnum PI'
So they could bring 'The Fugitive' to 'Night Court' to be tried
Widdout a single suspect.. an 'Unsolved Mystery' rise
Perry thought the Mob or somebody with 'Family Ties'
They investigate the Mafia... but 'Who's the Boss?'
Followed the money back to 'Clarles in Charge' of the Mob's cost
They booked Charles cuz they needed 'Fresh Prints' for police
But after '60 minutes'... 'Judge Judge' granted release
With Charles back on the streets.. the 'Fear Factor' arise
He'll murder men 'Married with Children' if 'The Price is Right'
These 'Night Riders'.. they were experts at evading the Po
Mag and Perry needed help from the 'Hawaii 5-0'
Plus maybe 'Columbo'.. so Charles better beware
This cops pissed.. found out his wife's havin 'A Current Affair'
This 'A-Team' was quickly back on 'The Beat' in a short while
With a fresh 'Hard Copy' of the 'Cold Case File'
They 'MASHed' out to 'Dallas'... with Charles in 'Jeopordy'
Facin Mob 'Family Fueds' while eluding the deputies
Charles hid out on a secluded 'Little House on the Prairie'
'Lassie' lived in the 'Monster Garage'.. so they was sharing
Charles medical conditon would refuse to let up
But 'General Hospital' was shut down from Health Care cuts
So he drove the 'Green Acres'.. tryna get to 'E.R.'
But 'Cops' was waitin to stuff Charles in the back of their car

[ArcherPriest]

no feeds?

[SpittFire23]

this was good you had to do some research or somethin to remember all them t.v. shows ryhme structure was good and wordplay and structure too

keep doin u

[ArcherPriest]

thanks for peepin this homie, much appreciated

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[Black Hornet]

well done.......
you had good structure and used excellent vocab.
rhymes were tight, and you kept the story goin!
good piece homie......

[E.A.S.Y.]

good shyt...ur vocab was strong, you was original I can tell you put thought into this, that shows you care what you post...yo keep coming like this...real os good

[warchild]

I liked the concept it shows you wanna be original and not post fake thug bullshit like most of these fags on Om so you get props for the concept.
Your vocab fitted the piece well, you didnt have to go over the top with it because it wasnt a deep piece more like a dark story that doesnt need a lot of emotion. The imagery was pretty good but obviously having all the shows names in there limited you to certain things you could write which affected the story a little. The flow was average a few multies mixed in would of added complexity to the piece but i still enjoyed reading it and the topic was good.
Return the feed on my OM:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=245014

[ArcherPriest]

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