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    Cold and Kicked Out

    I was fuckin freezing, it jus snowed bout a foot deep
    And I had to walk home thru the snow, playin footie [foot-tee]
    Then I got locked out because my brother took my key
    About two months ago, and he never gave it back to me
    So I go round to the back, and see an open window
    Climb in, knock over some glass ornaments
    Turn on the radio listen to tournaments
    And get pissed off at the broken shit and the cold
    I turned on the heating about an hour ago now
    But I’m still frezzin my bollocks off, can’t feel my feet
    Tryna make a cup of coffee but the water needs a high heat
    To boil…my mum comes and home and I’m like
    ‘Mum, why the fucks it so cold?’ I swore when I spoke and
    She was like ‘Don’t cuss at me, it’s fuckin broken’
    And she starts havin a go at me for sayin fuck and she’s
    And she’s usin the fuckin word every sentence every word, I say ‘Please
    Don’t have a go at me for this, it not my fault, you bought me up wrong
    You were listenin to Vanilla Ice, Well Ice, Ice Baby, Vanilla Twice
    So I had a bad childhood before I was born, because of your lice
    That you said no one knew about, but when I’m growin up on the streets
    Its all everyone talks about, your fuckin crabs, my life sucks’
    Then she had a go at me for talking about her personal problems
    And I was like ‘Fuck you bitch, I’m fuckin leavin’
    And she let me, so I’m writin this wack crap, I’m sneezing
    Freezin, wheezing, breathin to much cold air I’m seasonin
    Myself with pepper like a salad jus to warm me up
    SO now I’m tryin to sneak back in to mine
    Cos my friends won’t let me stay with them, they ain’t got the time
    To deal with all my shit that I’m goin thru with girls, school
    All my thoughts are confused, jumbled up, like a whirlpool
    And…oh my god! My brothers comin up to me
    He’s sayin sorry, he’s givin me my fuckin key
    So I go home, throw my mum out, call her a bitch
    And lock the door and change the locks
    And sock you saw…stranger cocks
    Can’t think what else to write because I’m back home
    Listenin to music, Eminem, and Dre on Off the Dome
    I’m out…
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    yo that was deep nice wordplay flow was tight the topic was just wow u never see anyone do that shit i like this it was eminem when he was sad nice 8-10 for my rating

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    comment on mine and i'll comment on ures (leave links)
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    this was good....topci was interesting and the rhymes were good
    flow was good and pretty smooth...structure was even most of the time
    vocab was pretty iight....work on that a bit.....good drop overall
    peace--

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    thnx, uppin #2
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    uppin #3
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    that piece really flowed it was done with great rhymes and even better structure 9/10
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    uppin #4 outta 5
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