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[Young Mista T]

Im comin straight off the top--
wit wordplay to get text typers hype...
i shed light on any roach'C's lookin to fight/
cuz i write fire n spit them flames--
on my way up like reversed crashin planes...
way from plain cuz i claim a higher derby--
movin bars of the shelf like i work for Hersey....
these cats aint worthy of the spit provided--
comin at me wit unified bull n i just divid it....
n cook up the beef like fast food restuarants--
wit lyrically porno flows cuz i bless the cunts....
neva settle for bunts always go fo grandslam--
tryin to kick it wit legends like Van Dam...

[SyCo_187]

this was alright u could use more mets and work on the structure abit
peep my shit
its called blue eyed jesus

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=243908

[TheCrunkKing]

uh, it was okay, wasent the greatest, but wasent the worst, needs to be longer, more multies, and better rymes

[Mic D]

^^^'MORE' multies???? aint no multies....a couple 2 syllable rhymes but thas blah...<--not considered multies in my book

Im comin straight off the top--
wit wordplay to get text typers hype...
i shed light on any roach'C's lookin to fight/
cuz i write fire n spit them flames--
^^^ehh....lil bit of wordplay if u combine the 2 lines....shed light cuz write fire...spit flames......coulda been worded better to condense into one line and get rid of the filler....

on my way up like reversed crashin planes...
^^^reversed crashing planes???? get it....but stupid

way from plain cuz i claim a higher derby--
movin bars of the shelf like i work for Hersey....
^^^bar/candiebar hershey lines written like this r played

these cats aint worthy of the spit provided--
comin at me wit unified bull n i just divid it....
n cook up the beef like fast food restuarants--
wit lyrically porno flows cuz i bless the cunts....
^^^wordplay...but still blah.....
neva settle for bunts always go fo grandslam--
tryin to kick it wit legends like Van Dam...
^^^blah

u got some sparatic wordplay....but the wording and concepts of them make it blah....atleast u attemptin it which is more then most katz in here.....if this is a key......try droppin somethin written cuz keyz=garbage 9/10 times

[Spekz]

^^cha dude....they boring

it wasnt a bad write, not bad at all 4 a key...

but see'n u can do that..y not come hard with some complexity/passion/really hit a topic hard...with vocab/imagery etc.

let see some hardness playa

get upz