User Tag List

Page 1 of 2 1 2 LastLast
Showing results 1 to 15 of 20

Thread: A Mothers Love.

  1. October 17th, 2005, 12:47 PM #1
    E s c
    E s c is offline
    ~~~{ :) E s c's Avatar
    Join Date
    Sep 2004
    Posts
    2,610
    Battle Record
    13-8

    A Mothers Love.

    A Mothers Love.

    A mothers love is something of the highest measure
    Something that some great and wisest don't treasure
    without it things don't feel right,like a shirt with creases
    Cause without it its like a flirt with life falling to pieces
    and a mothers love is why i never grew up to be a thug
    n`i would of threw up everyday without a mothers hug
    but without a mothers love hundreds of souls would die
    hearts would turn cold as perished souls would cry
    sadly,sometimes a mothers love can be wrongly handled
    and the whole treat of it can be longly dismantled.
    teared about by love vandals,and that hug is now meaningless
    like a untrustworthy promise slipped threw the mouth its feelingless
    cause a mothers life should be taken as love greatest token
    word cant explain or be spoken,this chain can never be broken
    and it saddens me when i see a mothers love misused
    cause i cry at night when i observate a mother love abused
    for everyone be lucky that you have your mother by your side
    threw life you should glide,and your soul should'nt hide
    so take my advice,and take your mothers life and cherish
    cause if not your heart and soul...will be forever perished


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...08#post3314008
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...42#post3314042
    Move on , no irony here.
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  2. October 17th, 2005, 12:57 PM #2
    warchild
    warchild is offline
    The True Psycho of RB
    Join Date
    Nov 2004
    Location
    My Own Mind
    Age
    40
    Posts
    3,164
    Battle Record
    1-0
    I liked the concept of this piece and you did a good job with the verse.
    The emotion in the piece was the strongest part of it, you made some good points about appreciating your ma etc. Me and my mothers relationship is pretty volatile but i love her cause weve been through a lotta shit so obviously i was really feeling the content so i give you props for this piece.
    Not a lot of people would of put this up as an Om cause they might think your soft or something but thats bullshit. Its nice to see some real oms on here not just thug/drug shit all the time so i liked it cause it was original.
    The vocab was good for this type of piece you didnt overuse it which always helps a piece out. The imagery was just what it needed to be for the topic.
    The flow was nice in most of the bars you got a bit inconsistant with it in a few of the bars but i still really liked the piece. But i think this is more of a poem than a rap but it was still dope.
    Return the feed on my OM:
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=241117
    I got caught for killing time but then i got away with words-Chino XL
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  3. October 17th, 2005, 02:14 PM #3
    ThaChampIsHere#1
    ThaChampIsHere#1 is offline
    You've Earned a Custom Title!
    Join Date
    Sep 2005
    Location
    detroit
    Age
    41
    Posts
    317
    Battle Record
    4-10
    i was feeling this piece
    it seemed more like a poem than a rap verse
    but i felt the emotion i'm prettyclose with my mom
    so this something i can relate to...........
    nice shit
    Battle needs Closing

    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

    ThaChampIsHere#1-vs-Roota


    OPEN MICS

    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

    my audio shit

    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

    .
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  4. October 17th, 2005, 02:32 PM #4
    E s c
    E s c is offline
    ~~~{ :) E s c's Avatar
    Join Date
    Sep 2004
    Posts
    2,610
    Battle Record
    13-8
    Hows this like a poem excacly?
    Move on , no irony here.
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  5. October 17th, 2005, 03:51 PM #5
    BigBoss
    BigBoss is offline
    You've Earned a Custom Title!
    Join Date
    Sep 2005
    Location
    3rd Coast
    Posts
    124
    Battle Record
    1-0
    Good piece. You had a great topic. Your whole verse stuck to the topic, which is something alot of people have trouble with for some reason. Its good because you had some emotion in it like when you said stuff like "and it saddens me when i see a mothers love misused cause i cry at night when i observate a mother love abused"....speaking of those lines, they should be switched in my oppinion like "i cry at night when i see a mothers love abused, cause it saddens me when i observe a mothers love misused" you under stand what i mean? are you "saddend" because you "cry at night", or do you "cry at night" because your "saddend"? know what im saying? Its not a big deal i was probabaly the only one that caught that.. but it was a real good OM, i likes it alot..good job

    BTW return the favor by voting on my battle thats in my sig.

    Im out, peace

    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  6. October 18th, 2005, 08:55 AM #6
    MagicConcept
    MagicConcept is offline
    Banned MagicConcept's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jun 2005
    Location
    BoSTon
    Posts
    984
    Battle Record
    16-5
    it was really emotional i felt it alot the structure was nice it was dope
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  7. October 18th, 2005, 09:40 AM #7
    King Humble
    King Humble is offline
    Banned King Humble's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jul 2005
    Location
    New JerZ
    Posts
    180
    Battle Record
    0-1
    the whole concept was deep i felt this alot man good drop
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  8. October 18th, 2005, 09:40 AM #8
    King Humble
    King Humble is offline
    Banned King Humble's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jul 2005
    Location
    New JerZ
    Posts
    180
    Battle Record
    0-1
    stay up

    i give u 8/10
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  9. October 18th, 2005, 11:30 AM #9
    SurpurbSkillz
    SurpurbSkillz is offline
    Newbie SurpurbSkillz's Avatar
    Join Date
    Sep 2005
    Location
    Bk all day
    Posts
    24
    Battle Record
    0-1
    this was some good knowlede
    i like you whole concept i felt it alot, real deep
    THE TRU BOOK

    :grinch:
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  10. October 18th, 2005, 11:31 AM #10
    SurpurbSkillz
    SurpurbSkillz is offline
    Newbie SurpurbSkillz's Avatar
    Join Date
    Sep 2005
    Location
    Bk all day
    Posts
    24
    Battle Record
    0-1
    RaTe: 9/10

    Ill drOP man
    THE TRU BOOK

    :grinch:
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  11. October 18th, 2005, 01:37 PM #11
    da king01
    da king01 is offline
    Banned
    Join Date
    Sep 2005
    Age
    33
    Posts
    5,227
    Battle Record
    19-6
    it was good, i loved the concept of this spit

    8.5/10
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  12. October 18th, 2005, 02:28 PM #12
    E s c
    E s c is offline
    ~~~{ :) E s c's Avatar
    Join Date
    Sep 2004
    Posts
    2,610
    Battle Record
    13-8
    Leave Decent feed ....Or fuck off...Thanks.
    Move on , no irony here.
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  13. October 19th, 2005, 01:08 PM #13
    E s c
    E s c is offline
    ~~~{ :) E s c's Avatar
    Join Date
    Sep 2004
    Posts
    2,610
    Battle Record
    13-8
    Up.
    Move on , no irony here.
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  14. October 19th, 2005, 04:46 PM #14
    mz.blaze
    Guest
    This piece had good emotion. Definately a good topic. Seemed like your flow was off at some points but other than that i have no criticism. Its good to see a dude who can write about more than killin people and all that. I think the structure was good too. It was deep-and it had a very true message too.
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
  15. October 20th, 2005, 12:31 PM #15
    E s c
    E s c is offline
    ~~~{ :) E s c's Avatar
    Join Date
    Sep 2004
    Posts
    2,610
    Battle Record
    13-8
    Uply.
    Move on , no irony here.
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote
« Previous Thread | Next Thread »

Similar Threads

  1. S.I Presents - " The Warmth Of A Mothers Love.."
    By Bar-Buryin in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 0
    Last Post: October 15th, 2010, 05:58 PM
  2. mothers day
    By Barack McClinton in forum The Lounge
    Replies: 15
    Last Post: May 12th, 2008, 06:54 PM
  3. Mothers/Mothers Day Feat. Ja Eazy & lOOk$
    By Kit Cloudkicker in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 28
    Last Post: September 11th, 2006, 06:53 AM
  4. a mothers love to her son
    By Eviley in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: May 2nd, 2003, 08:15 PM
  5. Mothers Love
    By Homer Phobic in forum Poetic Scriptures
    Replies: 11
    Last Post: April 10th, 2003, 07:01 PM

Posting Rules

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •  

Forum Rules