YO im new here first day and i started mangaing artist cuz im sorta a nerd but they was like i should write 2 cuz it would get better as we progressed so i started in july just experimenting wit different styles and i just want feedback no baggging just yes, no, need work just help me out cuz hip hop in my soul and i know im gone make it or my dudes make it

Shirley Temple[/B]
Her name, SHirley Temple,
rock curls in her head, shirley temples,
Im trying to get into shirleys temple,
to young for the cris so i got extra cherrie sput into my shirley temple.
Im in the VIP I let her through the Velvet rope
baby lets skip the whole dating go ahead and elope
she like what bout them other girls, baby i dont feel them hoes
but them thing s u missin in life i can feel them holes,
THat aint no lie,
baby i aint go lie,
and i know that cheating thing that aint gone fly,
but 2 please u i damn sure try,
yo im on da rode but u aint got 2 stay at home ma,
and when we have kids u wont have 2 be no stay at home ma