Think about those days

[Mackin']

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...0&page=3&pp=15

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...4&page=2&pp=15


Think About Those Days...



when i used to think about those days, all i would feel is regret and pain
its never been the same since the breakin down of the relationship i thought would remain
i reminisce about it, and i use to have to try to keep my head up
the relationship ended horribly, she cheated and i was fed up
at the time we was datin i thought she was the one, i was deeply in love
i wont lie, the times were fun, but now i feel hate when i think about those 5 months
when i found she was lein, it was hell, nothin can explain the pain i felt
she had control of me, like playin cards.. my ass was dealt
but now i take some time and think back at how i was so stupid
the truth is.. that since we broke up, my spirits have boosted
now when i see her face, in my mind all i see is a whore
i have the exact opposite feelings that i had for her before
i still 'member the first date n shit, thinkin it would be a everlastin relationship
but now as i think about it.. my spirits lift now that i feel like this
the thought of that its all over is beggining to feel.. priceless
and im glad i dont care bout her no more, it feels great
i escaped the pain.. now she wants me back, but at the sight of her face all i feel is hate..

[Mackin']

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[~ladie_streetz~]

aww i was feelin ya flow, the flow was tight, had nice vocab as well, i understood how u felt i been through some shit similar to that, hot rhymes you had keep up ya head up dont let a bitch bring you down from anything in the world, everybody gets their turn one day to feel the pain they cause to another

[Mackin']

thanks for the positive feedback.. i appreciate it

[Play-Boy187G]

The flow was good man. Had a nice little story line and everything. I think that there could be more descriptive shit, you know what I mean, just go in to detail and and use imagery about how much you hate her (or love her). Just little shit like that can make a great peice if you just put it together right. I'm sure already know all this stuff I'm just reinforcin it. Overall though it was good. Had emotion in it and easy to relate to and feel the authors thoughts. Good shit and keep flowin...
Play-Boy
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Good Lookin out...

[Mackin']

thanks for the feed and advice

[Mackin']

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[Spoken]

flow was great, you told your story vividly, exellent imagery, strait vocab, pretty basic and used topic, but you made it work for you in this case...
overall- 8/10... keep droppin homie...

[BigBoss]

Man, u read a page outta my story book bro...no lie, its an awsome piece because its obvious that this has happend to you because of way you explained it(or your just good,haha). But tha word choice you used to rhyme was good. It would have made it an awsome piece if you would have been a little more creative with the rest of the wordz that dont rhyme, but no big deal. Other than that it was great.
I can relate to you this whole with the whole story you told. If this really happend to ya i feel ya bro..Very good drop dude, i wanna read your stuff in the future.
BTW go vote at the battle in my sig.. im out

peace.

[Mackin']

uppin.. thanks for the feed

[Mackin']

uppin.. I WANT MORE FEEDD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! lol

[E><ZiLe]

nice shit hommey
flow was hot
emotion is needed in this
so more is better if u want tha reader/listener to feel wat u lived seen heard an are living through u feel me
it was good
8.5/overall

[Mackin']

thanks for the feed

[E><ZiLe]

yo give feed to my OM
Life situations!!

[Mackin']

iight