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October 7th, 2005, 11:19 AM
#1
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i rhymed half minded ive bn blinded to fait n c'n nothing on my plate to eat
to much heat n the kitchen people on the phone n listen
2yearz of wishn a better place to be nicer face to talk safe place to walk
g'z not bout the stalk thingz still chalkn nothing change not even the rearrgment of wrong can change the song sader then heaven cry mother earth
it hurtz to see the slip itz equip-n-equipment insqripted now can we take the time to lisen
a mission different to any other i cared bout my brother n the same to my friendz to my end keep the pen n pad dont b sad itz had better dayz then thiz we wish i.l.a could come out n play but therez 1 left to say i live across the stree n alwayz did
22thousand miles away but not that stray with out the sting you think
yo time by time rhyme by rhyme the lines getn closer
can we ghost ya
evermaster to everlasta master your art love the past people will never c again
or we'll live it at that.
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October 7th, 2005, 01:54 PM
#2
just recently copywritten? but you forgot title?
*sighs*
you had a consitent flow running htrough this piece
simple ryhminh words sad pad ect
nonetheless
it was a decent read
5/10
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