thnks...
thnks...
hey sum mo feedbck would make me proud -much love from tha white gurl.....
was a heart stricken piece
description was good and it put a little shudder in my heart reading some of those lines
i suppose if i was faced with the decision to chose in such a case
i probabaly would have ran away screaming
nice poem lil lady
8-10
hazy
That Shit Was Deep
I Felt It Alot
thnks a know its hard to choose between sumone u love or ur family and its hard so i choose both and i know ur probally like how but it can work just trust me if he loves me that much he would care about this which i know he does cause thats how we are.... mo feedbck...
mista grim check dis shit out
i love it. i can tell ur getting better. keep up the good work and thnx 4 feelin that way. luv u baby 4eva.
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work on your structure
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otherwise nice drop
stay up and peep Time Keels Over
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Originally Posted by Vamp.
thnks man...
dis is a love poem and is deep and personal but over all a A+ poem
and should do more poems if u won't 2
liked it...imagery complexity creativity...title fitted peice.....good shit man keep dropping
my shit is getting good...i told ya'll im getiing there so when im famous all mention ur names...
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