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  1. #1
    SikTrik
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    Heavenly Hell

    --A bit of an older right..i did awhile back ago--

    a mystical creature with such beauty and poise,
    silver streaks of a imaginary creation
    blends with the wind of this goddess
    glistening eyes reflect the rising sun
    seaking and trapping glorious imagery
    with the power of gods
    and beauty if the universe
    with its head held high
    a king among the creatures of myths
    a life; a world they live alone
    no kurruption or harm will intervien
    a peaceful meadow, and flowing streams
    flowers, and waterfalls create a scene
    that backgrounds to the true beauty
    of these things of there own
    live above us, in heavenly mists
    where good is triumphant
    and evil was never thought
    the beauty remains and lives
    with colors of the heavens

    we live in the middle of above & below
    you look above and thats all u need 2 kno^^
    see below and shutter with fear
    read below we are the above death so near

    furocious beasts seek blood
    black takes over the underworld
    to bring death and pitty to all
    where all are enemies
    every beast flows the blood of evil
    who all are tought and love to hate
    with no sun, just black clouds
    surround the sky with tremendous power
    to never let see a glimps of light
    littered with black swamps
    & over powering flowing lava
    a place of hell, and kurruption
    always remaining in the dark
    where fire breaths and
    smoke bewilders the beasts
    to a new shade of dazaster awakes
    all is pale, took by death
    an aroma of fear sweats from it
    all is lost and forgottin hear
    to see a shadow death
    to underlook the undeworld
    with the pain brought by hell

  2. #2
    HaZy
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    you kno sik
    the few pieces i have read from you really are sumffin
    this entire piece was filled with easy to grasp description and easy to read lines and points that came across so well
    some of the spellings cracked me up like the way u spelled disaster
    eh u still got the word out tho lol
    i think there could have been a more developed story with this theme
    however the way you carried it on was divine as well
    not many bad things to say with such a vivd descriptive piece

    well written

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