Unable To Help Myself

[Diabolic Visionz]

Unable To Help Myself

Sitting in on a trail for a murder i have not comitted
Looking up to the sky hoping god will get me acquitted
Staring at the faces of the jurors, they seem convinced
I have to agree the planted objects were strong evidence
But i remember that night very vividly..
............I was with my boys drinking at the old irish pub
I sat there and listened to the prosecution..
..............................With the main evidence and the sub
There was no way i could've killed my brother
So i had to speak
Got my attorney to call me up as a witness infornt of my mother
Swore on the bible that i would speak nothing but the truth
And so i started to talk on my behalf

"I see the evidence is pretty strong but i couldn't kill my own brother
Im a man with the obsession of unstopping happiness why hurt others?
I sit here and plee for my life..
............Telling you i didn't do it and im saying it with the most honesty
Never shown agression befor ask my friends..so why come after me?"

I sat there crying tears of fright cause i was petrified of being guilty
Pointing to the evidence they have, saying it was planted on me

"Im innocent until proven guilty as told in the equal act of laws
The evidence is strong i have to agree but damn like seriously..
Its my own brother my own flesh and blood..
.................He had nothing i wanted and he wanted nothing from me
We loved eachother to the fullest of our hearts, we were best friends
I would get bullied at shcool then he would come and me he would defend
Our dad made us promise to watch over eachother but we did better
We made an amendment to it, it was burried with him in a letter
It said we would watch eachothers back so no harm will come to the family
But after you guys charged me, my family ran away and abandoned me
Shit i would beg for my life and my brothers back but i have no life now
Cause the way you have my wife and kids...
.........................................Litterall y stabbing me with knifes now
What is there to live up to when you guys have taken everyhtingaway
I sit here and tewll you i didn't do it but shit you don't care what i say anway
So charge me with this crime send an innocent man to an overcrowded jail
You'll regret it when it happens again..
.................You catch the right guy then my innocence will prevail
No offence to these police but i was framed and thats all i have to say on my defence"

I stepped down from the witness stand shaken and scared, hoppeing im acquitted
But they just looked at the evidence and me saying im guilty, it was final and submitted
The death pentaly was what i got, it was what i dreaded..
...................I was guilty until proven inocent, in my mind it was embeded




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[Infamousfelonies]

Seems like a story that doesn't have a ending you had me at the end like what is going to happen next with your last line we don't know if you escaped or you actually died or you were annouced guilty or what you should do a part two because people are probably going to be looking for it I know I will because this is good man I like the structure the most out of everything the pauses in the rhyming man was great keep writing

[ADR]

u have excellent creativity but u drag a story way to long.....ur structure is shyt...u can barely tell were his lines start or stop.....ur imagery in this topic was great actually n vocab was good as well...complexity was decent and u didnt get off topic....

overall 8/10

["lil Neefy"]

^^ adr pretty much somes up what i have to say on this one.

good drop keep up the good work, and work on that structure a lil