Where I'm coming from

[Infamousfelonies]

You don't get the situation I'm here they ain't...man in the making
I'm not much for moving weight to get by cause
I'm real stingy with the kitchen and the bacon not mistaking
What I'm making cause it's good for the pause
I know what you been through keep a honest head for the bread
That we chasing...........(pause)keep my face in the streets
Cause a lot of dudes be hating and waiting for cases
I move with the movement thats only more problems for the feds
Sixteen in the streets get you nothing but the heat
Lets all get together and make silence with the basics
Covered and overshadowed by the matrix I hate it
Thats why I keep a team from the city hall
Cause we stick together sort of like the painted walls
In the building where they keeping all the favorite jobs
Shook by the cops cause they be looking for a opportunity
In response keeps the team together and brings more unity
In da hood.................This is where I'm coming from
City slums crack deals and I barely made it son
Lets keep it going anybody who can feel this
Lets get a part two anybody.......this is on some real ish

Appreciate the love man lets get somebody to do a part two though anybody who want to collaborate pm me and we can set something up man

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=233214
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...d.php?p=3205009

[warchild]

This was an ok verse but it lacked a lot of things.
First the concept has been done over and over which isnt a bad nothing as long as you bring something new into the piece to make it stand out.
And to me you didnt do anything new to make it stand out to me.
Some of the vocab was decent but your imagery was too basic i couldnt really feel or picture what you was saying. Your flow was also basic try and mix in some multies this will make your verses much more complex.
Next time you write think of a better concept and take your time writing your verses and gradually you will see an improvement in your writtens.
Keep Writing Keep Dropping.

Return the feed on my new om id appreciate it:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=235527

[mcl]

that piece was dope
i liked it all man
the flow rhymes structure it was all there