Our Mental State-Text Ethics Collab

[Eye`]

Our Mental State


Xtreme Malice

The ties of my souls scary, the eyes of these foes glary
Dispise what these hoes tell me, i'll rise if im chose fairly
Deprived and alone barely, such drive but im gone rarely
The vibe in my homes merely, from lies that arose daily
Debate'n and rate'n hoods, ya'll hate'n like satan would
My Deface'n and place'n goods, erase'n mis-understood
Create'n and change'n moods, in the end i think i would
Still see you herbs in hell, like im watch'n you take in pull
Refuse, 2 exclude, the rules, this dude's cool,a veteran
Excuse the fools, who choose to lose, but still i let'em in
Pollute 2 school, and prove my crew, sick with betta men
Brand new, elude, get used, neva fuck'd once, like selivents
Excell'n from herbs, now i heard we're solely appreciated
Life is short with words, in my eyes only if abbreviated
We chill and agree we'd make it, our skill is what we made it
Fate seal? i believe we've changed it, so ill and still we're rated
Such pride in our reputation, we'll rise with expectations
Collide with confrontations, obvious through observation
Mental states, differenciate, so collab no hesitation
Dont know where they minds lie, but mines on elevation

Vafinest

my mental state is unstable,alot of people think I'm crazy
cuz I go through different emotions,but they won't even phase me
one min I'll be happy,the next min I'll get angry
won't care about anything,til niggas try to hang me
cuz I went through alot of things,that won't keep my mind straight
so I just stay to myself,unless people are tryin to hate
cuz if they push my buttons,I'll be ready to kill
and put niggas in the grave,and just keep everything real
I got away with 8 murders,I'm a known face in the state
cuz the courts always tried to get me cuz they couldn't wait
I went to mental homes,had also seen adult prison
cuz I did the wrong things,I had made the wrong desicion
it made my mind go crazy,as I sit behind a cell
not even having freedom,that shit really felt like hell
fighting going on everyday,couldn't keeps my eyes close
I felt I was on the streets,and I was never gonna lose
thats why my head ain't straight,thats why I always stay quiet
and if you fuck with my emotions,thats when I'm goin to start a riot
so thats how I feel about my mental state
so you better not mess around,cuz you won't be able to escape

rabe

I am caged up in my dark state...traped inside my infurated minds state
My infureated foughts are to hard to shape...impososible to create
mankind was the one to decide my fate..to leave me in this state
And it does'nt make me hopefully,It just gives me more to impose hate
And am fucking hatefull of a decent life that i was deprived
EVERY one looks down on me with Dark red evil eyes
And,it hurts me inside but i keep it bottled up and don't cry...
Sometimes...it makes me shy,sometimes....i wanna die
But i keep my head up and try n shine and keep strong.
even alought at good times..i ALWAYS struggle to get along
my heart and happy thoughts never colide,and here i hide
Striped of ever bit of my fucking pride
Cause theres always a hicup always a trip and i cant just glide
and it's like satan just crushed my soul
and at that all my blood ran cold
And my heart has shattered...or turn to ice
With my fucked up life..as I am paying my price
so as stay strong am gonna have to wait
for that date
i can say,I have sorted my Mind's State

-Tangible-

Liquified humanity, candy painted with profanity,
running from a stampede of heat, makes me wanna handle thee
hatred that revolves around me, spark riots then split they never found me
my mental state blows into a cloud a round shape disappears astoundly
herbs scream for help but never loudly, steal the show and their salary
don't fuck with me, cuz I have powers that resemble Syntax mastery
spittin' bars, I'm a felon, stuck inside of a cell
bells ring and hells gates open to steal your soul, and start to sell
Put herbs under the turf, blurt out hate and you'll be hurt
disperse drains my pores, squirt, dead? you'll be the first
Text Ethics taken over this realm, fuck the other crews that exist
fuck it, going up against us, is like cutting your own wrists
make these faggot herbs piss, Chris will diss all here
don't crawl here, lure you back, face you to a cliff, FALL HERE!
This is the end, no one can contest, put all the herbs in there place
stuff them in a case, dont fuck with my mental state.

[Eye`]

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http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=235683

[Pharoah.]

aw goddamn that was fucgin doope

multies weer off the hook topic aws ill as fuck

vocab wsa nice and the flow was absolutely perfect
stay up 9.7/10

go peep What I See In The Mirror............

[Illus']

Xtreme Malice:

You displayed emotion nicely and your vocab was on
point. Your multies were good really good. Love the flow
scheme. Like the beginning that's would stood out to me
most, and just the way you touched on how you'll rise
was breath of fresh air to read.

Vafinest:

Your word usage was pretty basic, flow scheme
was basic as well. What drawed me to your piece
however was your emotion towards the end and
in the beginning. You did a pretty good job with
the emotion. Work on multies and word usage.
Overal decent verse.

rabe:

"Striped of ever bit of my fucking pride
Cause theres always a hicup always a trip and i cant just glide
and it's like satan just crushed my soul
and at that all my blood ran cold
And my heart has shattered...or turn to ice
With my fucked up life..as I am paying my price
so as stay strong am gonna have to wait"

^ Those lines were pretty nice, it caught my eyes.
Your beginning was good near the middle you were
getting redundant with words. Towards the end which
I quoted you were getting really strong . Nice emotions
expressed. Good job.

Suspicious:

Your verse was the stronges because it was the most
consistant. Multies vocab and expressing yourself with
the right word usage . like that Syntax Line and the Ethics
line. Pretty good job.




Overall pretty good collab.

Peace.

[MISTA GRIM]

nice u guyz all ways come wit the good stuff. keep it cummin.\
Nice flow multis and structure keep droppin.

[Eye`]

Thanks pharoah, illus artis, and MISTA GRIM.

uppin

[Spartan]

Malice-nice verse i fel the emotion in it your verse was real nice i could see that being a audio verse cuz it flowed very well you elevated nicely from what i used to see your from good shit

VA-wow you decent you need to work on your emotion cuz the more statements you have gets boring reword your whole verse and make some shit into like metas so you can get the feeling out and people be like damn keep dropen elevate though

rabe-work on your vocab son you eed to spell right chek for errors to need work on structure decent verse thought could be better cuz yor structure and flow threw me off but decent

suspisious-flow was amazing good shit i liked your whole verse multies was nice you could of made it mroe emotional but nice verse good shit from you all keep dropen and hope to see more from yall

[EvOLuTioN]

that was sick....long as hell now thats something that should be audio

[Eye`]

Bump!

[Nique.]

OMG someone can write!

I liked this..i aint breaking it down because you IM'ed me when i was about to leave

but this was above average..everyone had pretty good flow and good word usage..and went fluently through each person..great collab

thumbs up

[E s c]

<First topical.....EVER!

[Deviate]

Everyone had good flow here, however, it wasn't my sort of style. You wrote as if it were audio and as far as I know this is only an OM. None of you wrote using particularly complex vocabulary, however, you all still conveyed your message well. This wasn't a very complicated or thought provoking collab either, again it had more of an informal audio feel. You guys have the potential to write well, I can see it here, so keep at it, whether its in collabs or otherwise.

Let me know when you drop something new...

[mcl]

you all expreessed your selfs nicely this collaberation was off the chain
you all got the game on lock
9/10 flow 9/10 rhymes 10/10 all together

[Eye`]

k, Bump!

[Tomkat]

Wow excellent stuff, some of the best ive seen id give it close to a perfect 10, all the wordplay was there multis good topic everthing, yall did ur thing keep doin it