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    Don't Tell Me

    “Don’t tell me”


    Don't tell me that this world is color blind and race discussions
    are now irrelevant
    What will I tell my future children when they ask "Daddy can I be
    president?"
    Don't tell me this when Michelangelo's friend is hanging up on the
    walls of your church
    What will I tell my future children when they begin to question
    their worth?
    When the Bible clearly states that Jesus was dark colored and of a
    virgin birth

    Don't tell me that our government is not wicked when they are the
    biggest Hypocrites
    What will I tell my future children when they ask "Is it just
    Muslims that throw religious fits?"
    Don't tell me that the United Nations is the solution to the world's
    lack of peace
    What will I tell my future children when there is still war in the
    Middle East?

    Don't tell me that America is doing the best job it can to combat
    poverty
    What will I tell them when they ask about the acres of dilapidated
    property?
    Don't tell me that America's price of freedom does not come without
    a cost
    What will I tell my future children when they ask about the
    revolutionist's we've lost

    You may be questioning with all this how can your kids ever
    breakthrough
    With much prayer and being raised the right way! I thought you knew?
    When the world is stressing them out remind them to live carefree
    Teach them to accept all truth and soon the devil will have to flee
    By VerbZ

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    Can't teach you my swag! D. Josey's Avatar
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    I liked this piece, and the imagery you brought with it. It was different than the pieces I've read, and for that, I liked it.

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    okay thanx man......

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    shit yo..this was pretty nice..it was direct, n i was feelin what u were sayin..it was very poetic..havent seen too many ppl try this..it was very creative..i felt where u were coming from....u had great imagery...overall this piece was very good

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    thanx......uppin for feed......DROP FEED AND ILL GIVE FEED HONESTLY ON YALL PEICES

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    uppin.....drop links

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    uping...........wurd

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    upping........cmon drop lkinks

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    uppin

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    upping

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    i really liked this. it has a nice poetic structure and it discusses real issues. saw were u was goin wit this,. really felt it

    hit me up wit sum more links

    vote: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...3&page=2&pp=15

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    thanx i think i hit that up already tho....1

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    this was nice
    catchin title along wit ya poem as well
    your vocab was hot, liked ya wording of it. structure wasnt to fit for a poem, more like a OM/ free style or somethin. it was interesting, had a lot of topics but yous houlda hit more directly to a ceratin topic and made a poem off that. jus a centered topic that interests you and then it might have been better. it was decent, just need to work on some areas like the structure. it was creative how you spoke of different subjects, but for that type of poem, a different title would fit somethin for that
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    upping ........thanx and ill hit something of urs up.......(if its a battle ill hit it up fairly...

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    up.

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