You, Me, and Us.

[Bloomquist]

You, Me, and Us.
By Luke Bloomquist

I'm letting it all out. Speaking my feelings until my heart aches.
I was hurt by love, as were you. We've seen the negatives love can give.
I broke a promise. A promise to myself that I would stay clear of love.
To bide my time well, and take it slow to regain trust in such an axiom.
But as usual, love caught me trippin'.
I fell for you...hard. I promised myself I would like you,
and try not to let it get out of hand and go into something.
But It was a promise my heart couldn't handle.
It's so cliche`, but i've never felt this way.
The way butterflies buzz in my stomach and make me feel like a little kid.
The feeling that churns my emotions whenever I catch you smiling.
The tears that swell my eyes everytime I think of you sad.
Everytime I look into your eyes, an answer comes to my head.
"It's too good to be true" I tell myself. And it is, and I thank God for that.
Your eyes got my glimpse just once, and I never looked back.
Now we're together. Both been hurt by love, striving to make happiness
in this opportunity that has been handed to us on a silver platter.
And now as I glance back on love, I thank God for every bit of it.
Not just the good parts that make a smile on my face.
I thank God for the negatives. Getting cheated on...
Thinking I was in love and having my heart ripped in two.
I thank God for hurting me with love. Showing me how much pain love can bring.
I thank God for the negatives, for without those occurances...
I wouldn't have found you....
And now that I have you...I don't know if I can ever look back on life the same.
You give me a feeling I've never felt before.
As cheezy as it sounds, it's true.
We aren't in love...for love is such a strong word.
But It's soon to come, and I'm looking forward to it.
Always remember...You'll always be my boo.

Dedicated to Richelle Lauren Evangelista.
I'm looking forward to falling in love.

[Prince Escobar]

Awwwww *Gives Bloom the manly "go get em tiger" punches on the arm* man i thought you fell off like the teenage mutant ninja turtles at first, a couple forced words and weak lines but boy did it get good fast, one line that struck me "Your eyes got my glimpse just once, and I never looked back." that line changed the tone, skill level, and direction of the poem, it was a pivotal line and it held every bit of power that it needed, you're emotion translated well and u managed to make this piece "just right" i might revise the beginning if i were you but the rest of it was sublime, fine job Quistmaster Flex...1luv.

[Bloomquist]

In no way did I try to do good on this poem. It's personal, as you can tell by the dedication. But thanks Fresh, your feedback means alot, and I respect it.

Peace man, get at me on aim if ya wanna talk.

[juvesgurl06@yaho]

can a g be and the crew we will be the best

[~ladie_streetz~]

your rhymes shoulda been worked on though
but your vocab was decent, the topic was nice as well very sweet and lovin. not all poems need rhymes in it, but i honestly thought rhymes wit the poem woulda set it right, but it wasnt bad just that you fucked up on that part. all in all it was well written for the structure and very interesting

[HaZy]

i have various thoughts on this piece

im letting it all out

that could have paraphrased the entire piece

there was some good lines and those seem to fall in just the right place to make the read continous

reading this
thank God for hurting me with love. Showing me how much pain love can bring.

made me think about how sometimes people go so overboard about love (false , pretend, or real) and how we as people would never grow emotionally without expericing any and all of those types of love

that was my fave line in this piece

none the less

good poem nice them and perfect title 8-10
hazy

[triple o.g]

yo nigga im the truth . you da man but its my turn

[!.VeRbZ.!]

liked it...imagery complexity creativity...title fitted peice.....good shit man keep dropping