SlimDeaz vs Konquest

[Konquest]

10 lines
blind spit
10 min checkin
15 min drop
g'luck

[Konquest]

check

[SlimDeaZ]

chekk....g/l.. 15 im droppin

[Konquest]

yo fams you up 4 a battle...

Set it up

got no creds... can u

Look at the kid now wased all of his cred
Wasted em all so quick and no wins on ya head
He may think he doped up sniffin crack by da boulder
Ya can't be dope u lost to a nigga that's Sober
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=277841

Look at ya life kid ya name yaself slim deaz
D stand for dumb as a doorknob and he makin straight D's
Down the narrow path of writin and thinkin of u
The narrow path gets slimmer even lookin at u
It's bout that time to close da restaruant u heard
Why is kid still here, he already been served

Link is a battle

[SlimDeaZ]

?
I trouble-dudes wit humble-moods to crumble-you
........and i'll leave ya hopes-in-shooks and the only tyme you seen a 'W'
is wen you 'held two open-books'!!!...

ur a dyke dat like findin bitches,plus KOn lack ryhmin sickness....
put ya "brain on wall st." now mayb u could "mind ya business"
I inflict pain like pornographic torture tactics Lamb couldn’t endure
an ass whip duct taped to the mattress”,
.......you “stuck on the same path” like “mornin traffic”….
ur hype u weak,u "dream of punches" like u "fightin ya sleep"
....u twice as cheap
Kon winnin dis battle? cum on fams datz like "bitin ya teeth"....

EAZY

[Wyte..]

Look at the kid now wased all of his cred
Wasted em all so quick and no wins on ya head
no
He may think he doped up sniffin crack by da boulder
Ya can't be dope u lost to a nigga that's Sober
weak
Lookat ya life kid ya name yaself slim deaz
D stand for dumb as a doorknob and he makin straight D's
again, weak
Down the narrow path of writin and thinkin of u
The narrow path gets slimmer even lookin at u
not hard enough
It's bout that time to close da restaruant u heard
Why is kid still here, he already been served
wack attempt

Overall - This verse was fucking garbage, you come in Textual Realm thread saying your would beat everyone, so i expected you to atleast be decent, but this was terrible. Word on your punches and shit. Read LLL battles and work in the cypher and you will get better.

vs.

I trouble-dudes wit humble-moods to crumble-you
........and i'll leave ya hopes-in-shooks and the only tyme you seen a 'W'
is wen you 'held two open-books'!!!...
no
ur a dyke dat like findin bitches,plus KOn lack ryhmin sickness....
put ya "brain on wall st." now mayb u could "mind ya business"
ok
I inflict pain like pornographic torture tactics Lamb couldn’t endure
an ass whip duct taped to the mattress”,
.......you “stuck on the same path” like “mornin traffic”….
lol
ur hype u weak,u "dream of punches" like u "fightin ya sleep"
....u twice as cheap
Kon winnin dis battle? cum on fams datz like "bitin ya teeth"....
no

Overall - Meh...You had an okay verse. You had a couple okay punchlines, i think you could have came a lot harder then this. Also you should take the ("") out of your verse, it fucks up your structure and makes the verse a lot harder to read. Read LLL battles and work in the cypher and you will get better.


V. SlimDeaZ

[Warming]

SlimDeaz killed this but the 3 you could have had a lot stronger punches if u werent going for the 3 line multis:

I inflict pain like pornographic torture tactics Lamb couldn’t endure
an ass whip duct taped to the mattress”,
.......you “stuck on the same path” like “mornin traffic”….

the morning traffic segment seems completely unrelated
the wall street punch was tight but the rest of ur stuff was a little shaky

konquest breaking down your drop is depressing so ill make it quick
the best part of ur verse was ur weak personals- with sober and Ds but both of those were really only like half of a punch because of shitty setups
and do not rhyme u an u

D... easy