Poetic Mathematics

[.Clever.]

Poetic Mathematics

Poetically exacerbated...I gravitated bare feeling oddly squared
Married to cadences paced upbeat my patience stays prepared
Kuz evil stares are hard to clense like Earths mighty ignorance
In segments...humanitys equation spits mind bending pigments
Cut pessimistically legends kuz i have dark miles of confessions
Number after number lessons i stay working hard like peasents
By essence i bleed liberally for paper melting thoughts to vapor
During life and death my spirit's accosted by realitys calculator
Schematics construct skyscrapers of freedon using trigonometry
Its not comedy we’re all classless in summers broken taxonomy
Triangled at angles feel lost in Atlantis deep thoughts implanted
Like geometry classes my lifes going in circles without passes
Patterned lanterns hang lights in secluded caverns I call home
Paths traversed I se all thats real in criss-crossed honeycombs
Pent up anger hexagon signs revolving around no intersection
Roll snake eyes tired but alive those are probability deception
Stroke a harps tranquility to strike notes to accord accordingly
Emotionly I cry...yet see sadder days multiply proportionately
Done tracking linear statements escaping in numbers rationed
Take action when precipitation flows in 100% fraction passion
Keep thinking lifes problems have solutions ask Y to be X factor
Subtract understanding from knowledge..trace truths protractor
Good days are numerated but never numerous and rewritten
Bad days bottom in denomination as quantity is the disposition
Swallow my shallowness in Strokes to pop corks of thoughts
Lost in detachment…....................................... .............
.................chalkboards trace todays emancipation nonstop

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[warchild]

I thought this piece was half dope half wack.
The thing i didnt like about the piece was the vocab i think you just put the big words in to make your rhymes seem better, it just doesnt work for me just putting big words in your bars for the sake of it makes the rhymes too cryptic. I mean ask yourself do you think of you released this as an audio do you think the average person in the street would understand it?
I dont think so, theres nothing wrong with having a nice vocab but next time you write a verse try and use your vocab more constructively.
The thing i liked about the piece was that the concept was deep and some of the imagery was very strong so i'll give you props for that.
But work on your vocab try and mix in some multies into your verses and i think you'll be a doper writer.

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[Trema]

Warchild is true, i do see alot of theese, peeps trying write rhymes with shit vocab and put in a few big words and they think its dope. Dont get me wrong um not haiting just telling you d truth that you need to work on your vocab homs ayt!

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