illest rhymes

[BMoNeYWhAt]

YO my name is bpik i gotta thick dik i can do it quick dem girlz want it slow they can give me a blow, they know who i am and where i come from last night i robbed the local tom thumb im the illest MC yes and am you dont believe me then ask you wife trust me last night i fuckked her then stabbed her with a knife. and yes she was nice i popped her cherry twice wait is that even possible i dont kno but just listen to god his gospel. next time you try to rip me on the mic you gunna get thron down and yes plz give up your crown theres a new champ. and look it my betime i gotta turn off the lamp.

yeye straight outta bpik record nukka plz...

[.Clever.]

meh this was not that good homie...look at the vets OM's and youll get the idea...for now on just do your lines by bars and keep elevating..

[Trema]

This isn't even worth replying to, you broke so much rules posting this post:

Must have skills
Must read rules blah

Make your shit 16lines thats a rule, and read the rules lol before posting wack stuff like this for real.

[warchild]

This was wack, it was a boasting piece and you didnt drop one nice line.
Your structure was unreadable, your vocab was childlike, your flow was non existent there was nothing even basic in this piece, pretty terrible.
You wanna improve work your structure out, up your vocab(Look in a dictionary. Work on your syllable rhyming think of a song concept and mix in some metaphors.

If you wanna learn how to write Ill Rhymes check my shit out:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=234259

[Mistral]

Read the rules.