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    'Weathered The Storm' IJL Collaboration

    Different Styles Here Hope You
    Readers Like The Blend.



    Laureate

    I sat trapped in the back of Satan’s left pocket.
    My soul just an artifact, years since I lost it.
    Tossed it and labeled it as expired and faithless.
    Never conformed and conserved, so I jus wasted.
    Demons surrounded me, saturated my flesh.
    As bloody hail corrupted the good I had left.
    Despair and lost cause rained down from the sky.
    As demise slowly climbed and hope declined.
    Lightning was crimson and fueled the fire.
    As my body lay rotten from sinful desire.


    MakeShyft

    The sun burnt black, and the air lacked oxygen.
    That feeling is back, the storm gonna box me in.
    Clouds collided, and rocks of ice flew sky low.
    Our love is put on hold, as the storm goes idol
    I’m feelin wack, as the lightning brightly cracked.
    My heart unexact, that tension is what we lack.
    Created that love-lost packt, yea I miss it too.
    Weathered the storm when my lips were kissin you.
    Two minds become one, now together reborn.
    One beautiful mind, in the eye of the storm.


    Paranoid

    Electrical clocks hit my brain, unable to fit my name.
    I lay out excuses, so I follow Simon as I’m to fry fame.
    Why do I generate, the lights are out? I feel so terrible.
    All the rain, this weather made me steel the horrible.
    So I picture the lost scripture, forcin the wind at night.
    My mind lost, my crime tossed, sourcin a hint at sight.
    Taken all the torched flame, spiritually un described.
    God on hand, he was destroyed from the un subscribed.
    But at least I touched the storm, so warm I had charm.
    Ring the alarm, I’ll buzz the intelligence of bad harm.


    The Great White

    Look sweetly little one, behold the aftermath...
    Water covers all... mixed with bodies and broken glass..
    The government points fingers, to the right and to the left...
    fault matters little though to those that traversed the river of death..
    Look at a nations failings, gaze at the twisted smile of fate..
    many stranded without food, so they starve, and they await..
    Either their creator or flashes from cameras in their face..
    "ma'am can you tell us, really transpired that day?"..
    From here you can see it all, from here the visage takes form..
    Above and beyond the clouds ..here you'll weather the storm..


    Illus' Artis

    I'm spiritually in a war against a diabolical form.
    Purged and torn. Informed my physical is warned.
    Restricted, predicted obstacles, optics still shocked.
    Let downs. Mind trapped in a box. Getting mocked.
    I've been through it and more, stand, I still through it all.
    God's strength, tackled seasons Winter through the Fall.
    Due to you, I bleed through objectives that abused,
    me physically, mentally and spiritual. Mental arose ,
    allude ish that dooms the frail individuals. Was formed
    scorned, literally thrown in and Weathered The Storm.


    Kayze

    As I grasp my life’s last letter written in bloody water
    franticly re-arrange my position to steer clear of a anguished slaughter
    prevail a pause,not wanting to lay a hand out of place
    evasively release my anger dashing for safety without a visible trace
    A unknown critical face arrives from the misty road
    violent hand reaches for my neck in attempt to make my mind corrode
    Pulling away I relies I cant escape a non physical form
    realization of my destiny I see there's no escaping the visible storm

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    was that a collaboration? I saw your name and a few titles. I didn't know if it was more rappers, but that must have been the best piece I've read, we're all human so it's hard top find the right words. It's like God spoke into you and saw a vision for you to keep. What was the story inspired from?

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    nevermind 1st question. I hardly ever read anybody's title, but when I did I read collaboration.

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    yes its a collab.

    uppin for feed. good drops from everyone.

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    I wasnt feeling the first three....the delivery was mad weak...The Great white came with some niceness in his structure and personification... Illus' Artis was pretty nice with the allegory....n i liked the choppy flow...finishin off wit kayze waz altright but it wasnt strong....overall I say ya bois Ill and The Great were doin it nice...the rest was pretty blah....


    Igido
    He knows all and sees all...the creator of our creativity ...I follow The Divinity

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    Thanks for your opinion up.

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    I do topicals so i like all the verses
    but my favorite was The 1st verse,

    I could image what see was saying and
    how she felt. All the verse was good, and
    it was a good topic to begin with, because so much could be
    said from just " Weathered The Storm "
    the only problem i had was The Great White, His Sturecture was confusing to me
    maybe if he hadn't center his writing it woulda been better, other than that
    This piece is Exclent
    ~1~

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    yo this shit is crazy..this is probally the top crew of this site..every was is raw and full of vengence good use of vocabualry of everypart..keep putting shit out i would like to see more yall is raw..keep it up

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    upin.

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    good work guys those were good verses tossed together

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    I want atleast one good breakdown on this collab
    since I atleast replied to about 4 Open Mics and gave
    greate feed. Lets go don't be like that people.

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    ^yea i'd like to see feed on everyones verse too

    come on wheres the good feeder's?

    uppin

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