...Young Rappers...(I'm good...message sent)

[Cody Nash]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=228569
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=228579
^^^My links...

This is a message sent to all the young rappers out there...sporting ice...rolling dice...thinking they shit is sugarie sweet and plain nice.
Just letting them all know...that In this world...I'd beat they ass Twice...

Commentary is thinning as rappers start the rise of a beginning,
Ruptured thoughts cause them to lose all hope of the winning,
They start to stress and belive in the worlds of open sinning,
Rappers rap...they ain't singing, Way of life like janitors cleaning,
Cooking new raps is the new sense of styles, now rappers are childs?
They still got much to learn, like at your first wedding recidals,
Constantly at jewlers and bridals, Sporting all ices and the chains,
These rappers are so blinded they even forget they real names,
Think rappings fun and games, It's about the soul of your inner lanes,
Not easy like breaking off the hollow tips of suckers and candy canes,
They criminals bought to be taught by fake fames...I cant take that,
Thinking they got the swang, but Youngsters aint swinging a real bat,
Jeezy thinks he's cool because he's got his own hat, that aint phat...
They sanging and I hear words and all I think is:where's the real soul at?
They just like a young cat...They still need milk from they're parents,
They need to learn responsiblity and the get a chance to expirience...
Love and where its at in this world today, to legends i got nothin to say,
Doggs I worship your fame...I keep all your lyrics stuck on play,
New worlds taking flight in the break of day, Out of sight and mind,
Hearing Ludacris and Jay-Z...words pronounced most people can't even find,
They're words are tru and kind, Rapping with number one contenders,
No I'm not a thug...But at least I don't make a living off bendin fenders,
I get hate notes all day, from confidential senders, But I don't care...
Mess with me? they wouldn't dare...They just listen and give me the stare,
They stare in true astonishment...I made this to master agnolishment,
To god I hear the consent, on grounds to the devil..all words I've meant,
People look at me...and say your message has been irrelevant,
I look back and say I don't need your content, I'm good...message sent

[ExPlOsIvE]

First thing bro wat with the hostility againsty young rappers, most people got the same love for music on this site.
But anyhow this was a nice drop so its nice to set the cheeky young rappers straite who fink dey the best lol. This had a nice storyline bro and u kept to it well, the rhymes were nice and the wrdplay was tight. U had nice mid line rhymes but i didnt notice that many multis.

Overall i'd say it was bout and 8.2 out of 10 and a nice drop,

Peace Hit me up on !!! Sick And Tired !!! plz bro.

[Cody Nash]

Thank you ^^^ this was kind a quicky...I was in a hurry to write it cause I wanna go get some battles done...I will make more with more time put into them...So I can get that 10 out of 10 record...Peace

[Trema]

Firstly your structure was what was confusing me, the font and shit. It was an ayt piece its just the structure made it look kinda whack no offense. Good topic although if your talented your talented dont matter what the age you are. In future try to work on your structure and dont make the text that big, just gets boring to read after a few secs. Overall nice try though, keep at it!

[DoRcHeStErRiDeR]

that was hot it had a nice theme and u said it right im bout to make one like that n see if i can do any better lol but anyway u got the message through i think that these mutha fuckas who think they the shit are gonna get merked whether they like it or not! haha get up with me later..o ya n bout that crew..im too fuckin tired i changed my mind ill be on around 8 tonight n we will sort that shit out cuz im already in a crew but i was just bored so i gave him a link n ima general...ahhh...o well me n u as the leaders would take all..fo real............1

[Soule]

Thus us some pimp ass shit 9-10.
Keep the good shit up braw.

[Cody Nash]

Uppin...................Leave comments

[Johnny 6-feet]

You're not good, i hate to shatter your ego but this piece was average at best. The subject was played to death and you used monosylabbic rhmyes, forced rhymes and basic vocab to keep this plain. You should aim for an original topic and come up with some deeper imagery to capture a readers interest. Learning how to do multi's would improve the flow. Also, you should shorten your lines a little.

Keep elavating, and don't post lechure's to newbies when you're a newbie yourself.

[Cody Nash]

Lol @ this....^^^...I have an alias...Btw thanks for the suggestions....Upping for more

[waterflow]

Yeah That Was Hot Even Though People Probaly Wanted To Curse U Out After That. Even Tough I Am A Young Writer Not Rapper U Can Check My Poem Out Its Called Un Titled/ The Real Stuff Or Something Like That But That Is My First Posted Poem I Just Join And Im Really Young Just Give Me Some Feedback

[Viktor Fallon]

This was AN ight drop u had some good lines even tho most kids would really not understand this cause they all wit that.....but it wasnt bad keep it up.....7/10...1

[Cody Nash]

Thanks uppin for more feed...........................

[Cody Nash]

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