Unperfect Knowledge

[Jawn Raw]

Unperfected Knowledge
To advance with a profound soul of greatness,
Convicted in the junctions..
To predict shame, or learn frustration from it,
When the decision is the function..
So you proceed with a keen sense of dignity,
Commotion has its surrounding..
Such depth in justice, found with mentality,
And giving up without rebounding..
Retaliate with force, embellish in it’s agony,
So smart, it’s literally lethal..
Never pathetic, but maintaining its own tribute,
Such evil its facts relate to people..
Creating pain and sorrow, by connecting directly,
Compounded in fierce walls..
Heavenly struck, such violence is silent to hear,
Education with such falls..
The ghetto eventually was served it’s hesitation,
Never helped, never penetrated..
Pours of tears fall, crawling up the mistreated,
Unable to figure the self debated..

Caught up in myths, it’s reason was unheard..
To give all for it, it’ll give you,
Is all that I ask of you, please give out your word..
Cause it lives for all that’s true,

Generated in it’s own desperation and solitude,
Prosecuted from it’s attitude..
Presented as a living being, with it’s own feeling,
So Christ could hand out gratitude..
A disaster no one could handle, unfortunately,
Knowledge itself couldn’t bare..
Versatility and its scare, tainted by the hatred,
This dynasty built by it’s snare..
I wondered was gods mind possessed with evil,
Trapped in it own grasp..
Unable to last in a factor, death was to fall upon,
All who stratified it gasp..
In it’s time, education was situated a wreck,
Protection had its addiction..
Let this nightmare end, selected by the worse,
At level, yet above friction..

Caught up in myths, it’s reason was unheard..
To give all for it, it’ll give you,
Is all that I ask of you, please give out your word..
Cause it lives for all that’s true,

Eventually this terrorism was viewed as such realism,
Tarrying through the visions..
But still granted possession, this session was soon over,
Yet he still had some decision..

[Spoken Deity]

this is different then what im used too... i do mostly freeverse but this is good...
Your rhyme scheme first of all is good. its well structured and intelligent thru out the piece. You have an easy to read structure that makes it look VERY clean. You imagry was well put to gether. I like it all together...
enjoy

[TwixSin]

will edit in the morning.

[Spoken Words]

this was good different style buti liked it had flow to good i liked it

[Johnny 6-feet]

A dope topic with a nice rhythm. This was a quick piece? It didn't read like one. The feel of the piece was definately a cryptic one but the images you suggested and the strength of the vocab you used, along with a solid rhyme scheme definately brought this thing to life. The 'hook' was simpler but also fitting for the topic. If i had a single criticism of this piece it would be that the meaning was occasionally obscure, but this happened rarely. Overall it was an impressive read.

Kudos man, kudos.

[Jawn Raw]

^thank you very very much Johnny,

im such a good poet

[Jawn Raw]

uppin for feedback, people leave links.