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  1. August 22nd, 2005, 12:46 PM #1
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    " My promise "

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...76#post3013276
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=224798


    " My Promise "
    by : Pursuit

    Before I do anything , I wanna dedicate this song to the people that's been behind me from the start . My peoples from my hood...and others like people from Divine prophecies , Darkcide , and my other crews that supported me in rapping and emotional times . I wanna shout-out to all in East Coast , West Coast , North Side , South Side... My peoples from the hood , " Killa K " , " Nyne " , " Looney Tune " , My rival , and my Ex , Natayah . I wanna thank my old music teacher , Ms Ransom , My mom , My dad , and My Brother Shawn , aka , " S.Dub " for optimizing my love for music .




    Verse :

    Aight , I might be young , but I seen the world's evil .
    Satin taking souls , hatred spreading like the meassles .
    I hate it when strong mothers are left in sorrow
    Cause they son killing people like it's no tommorow
    If this is what life is about , then it's no point living
    We shoudn't have to act like something just to " fit-in "
    Why have power ? when you can have energy ?
    So if Nas has the " Ether " , then I got the " Remedy "
    Killing , Guns , Violence , that ain't what rappers do .
    And if 50 cent is all he worth , then he got taxes due .
    Some " Cash Money " rappers talk about Gang banging...
    So killing Venus' Half Sister was nothing but dedication ? ( Yetunde Price )
    Living on the streets , shooting peoples , no hesistation .
    Struggling to survive in the hood , wit no education .
    You might see me around, but when im at my modest
    But when you see me heading for the crown it was nothing but a promise



    Hook ( Chorus ) ( 2x ) :

    I promise Ya Im gonna make it to the top....
    Im like the street sweepers , cleaning up the block
    I went from hero to zero , Now Im starting from scratch
    A dream of a prophecy revealed witta rap

    Verse :

    It's like I was fated to rap but not in for tha money .
    Not in it for tha rep , drama or in for tha honeys
    I was inspired by this rap game , to change the media
    To go to more places than people on expedia .
    I made this Promise for everyone who believed my talent ,
    Could help me survive through this rap game's gauntlet
    I believe my ryhmes could set an inmate free .
    I think my flow is tight....so others relate to me .
    And if I don't make it to the top , you can do whatever you wish .
    So if im gonna get tooken out of the game...My lyrics will be missed
    It sends a strong impact to the people....one you'll never resist
    But Im always gonna be the best , number one on everyone's list .
    So now watch as im " Gonna make it " just like jadakiss.

    Hook ( Chorus ) ( 2x ) :

    I promise Ya Im gonna make it to the top....
    Im like the street sweepers , cleaning up the block
    I went from hero to zero , Now Im starting from scratch
    A dream of a prophecy revealed witta rap


    Thankyou everyone here for being there man..

    Yetunde Price , Tupac , Notorous B.I.G , Easy E , Martin lurther King , left Eye , Jam Master Jay and Aliayah , R.I.P
    Last edited by Pursuit; August 22nd, 2005 at 12:56 PM

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  2. August 22nd, 2005, 01:09 PM #2
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    yo that was nice man u spit on what happening in the world today. i loved it it caught my soft side homie keep it up aight.
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  3. August 22nd, 2005, 02:46 PM #3
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    could have been better..your gettin somewhat better..ive seen better though...just keep elevatin and droppin..~1~


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  4. August 22nd, 2005, 05:24 PM #4
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    thanks and imma try to improve . uppin this

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  5. August 22nd, 2005, 05:32 PM #5
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    thanks and imma try to improve
    man, well treason thinks ya need to.... but to me, that was a straight dope drop... i was feelin ya there on everyline lol...but this outstanded for me >>

    Why have power ? when you can have energy ?
    So if Nas has the " Ether " , then I got the " Remedy "
    ^ ^ ^ i actually went back and re-read tha damm line coz i was listenin to tha song while readin this... so yea, flow was on point i figured... was a great drop.. keep it up mayn
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  6. August 22nd, 2005, 08:23 PM #6
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    lol thats funny but yea . uppin . please people tell me how it is

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  7. August 23rd, 2005, 08:49 AM #7
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    c'mon upping !

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  8. August 23rd, 2005, 09:12 AM #8
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    This was a decent piece, the concept wasnt really original but it was a decent piece for whay it was.
    Use was just describing your neighbourhood and what you think of the world etc. I thought the wordplay was the best thing about the piece, the structure was fine the vocab fitted the piece well you didnt overuse it.
    The thing i didnt like about the piece was the flow it was pretty weak, the only bars that had a nice flow was this couplet:
    I believe my rhymes could set an inmate free
    I think my flow is tight so others relate to me

    That flowed nice but the rest of the bars didnt flow as nice as they should youve got a talent for writing just work on the flow and mix in a couple of metaphors to your verses and they will improve a lot.

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  9. August 25th, 2005, 08:41 PM #9
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    aight thanks homie....upping..........

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  10. August 25th, 2005, 09:13 PM #10
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    im just a beginner so it may not be a compliment if i say nothin but that shit was pretty fuckin sick
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  11. September 17th, 2005, 06:30 PM #11
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    Thanks yo.... It's good for you as a newbie replying and feedbacking it means alot . anyways mods don't get mad at me for uppin this please... I just came back from fixing my computer and It finally works now

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  12. September 17th, 2005, 07:10 PM #12
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    Quote Originally Posted by warchild
    This was a decent piece, the concept wasnt really original but it was a decent piece for whay it was.
    Use was just describing your neighbourhood and what you think of the world etc. I thought the wordplay was the best thing about the piece, the structure was fine the vocab fitted the piece well you didnt overuse it.
    The thing i didnt like about the piece was the flow it was pretty weak, the only bars that had a nice flow was this couplet:
    I believe my rhymes could set an inmate free
    I think my flow is tight so others relate to me

    That flowed nice but the rest of the bars didnt flow as nice as they should youve got a talent for writing just work on the flow and mix in a couple of metaphors to your verses and they will improve a lot.

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  13. September 17th, 2005, 07:22 PM #13
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    man i not really just a newb but homie u straight got skill

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  14. September 17th, 2005, 07:23 PM #14
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    you really talked about meaning ful stuff you remind me of a young big l

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  15. September 18th, 2005, 10:27 AM #15
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    thanks...come on peoples uppin More!

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