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    indifference

    constantly contenplating spiritual exsistance
    and mans obbsession with ones indifference
    colour creed taste and religion
    were all the same whether muslim or christian
    cos lets face it if your racist
    are u really any better than a rapist
    as a lack of intelligance and tastless views
    leave u acting like an adolescent your whole life through
    cos my point has been proved if you read the facts
    yet i still consciously admire those few selfless acts
    commited by those you would class as saints
    yet they just want to rid the earth of its pains
    you dont have to be literate to put your views in words
    and you are not a misfit if at school the bullys have hurt
    your pride and your dignity makeing it hard to stand tall
    but let them get the better of you you make yourself feel small

  2. #2
    feedback please

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    TreaZoN sILLable's Avatar
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    no real complaint aside from your structure bein off a little..pretty ill..keep droppin and elevatin.~1~


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    I liked this because it was straight to tha point
    your flaws in this piece were tha some lines were stretched compared to others
    and maybe tha simpleness of some tha rhymes,
    otherwise, it was very good..

    rtf?
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=224903

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