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Thread: Live Or Die Pt.1

  1. August 16th, 2005, 09:58 AM #1
    Lil Drew
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    Unhappy Live Or Die Pt.1

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    I'd rather live instead of to die but thats not my choice so I'm gonna ride or die either way ima die and lose my life,
    so god please don't take me away because i don't move far away into the heaven gates of your place,
    but i was scared die one night because i was think about the war thats going on day and night,
    but hey one good thing about going to heaven is i'll get to see eazy-e,tupac and big again in heaven,
    but i wannna live till i'am old as dirt can u read the young jeezy trap or die t-shirt,
    so i'm gonna stay trap and strap for this world and then i'll die this world let me dedicate that to all them beautiful girls all accross the world,
    its just like tupac and big said in runin(dying to live) after they died they said
    Why am I dying to live, if I'm just living to die,
    so pleas god keep me a live
    cause i want my family to live together forver and die together and be gone forever......

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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=221058
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=221054
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=221049
    Last edited by Lil Drew; August 16th, 2005 at 10:02 AM
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  2. August 16th, 2005, 09:59 AM #2
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  3. August 16th, 2005, 10:47 AM #3
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    the flow is kinder rollin loose.. with lines being a lil overstretched
    theres no need to keep repeating pac n big names or spitting ruff ryder quotes. .."ride or Die"

    i liked a couple of lines still tho .. that one wit the t-shirt

    was decent b ut yo needa get the flo tite on point n shit

    stay at it
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  4. August 16th, 2005, 10:49 AM #4
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    Tighten up your flow and throw in some more advanced vocab.
    take more time with your work and just keep writing.
    I believe that everyone can become a very good writer with practice,so keep at it.
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    NOTHING WILL STOP MY ACHE!
    I WANNA FUCK ALL THIS SHIT I HAVE TO TAKE!!
    My enlightened state of mind my desperate DECISION!
    I find serenity in so much,pain,
    Slit my wrists and let my body,drain,
    Clench my fists and let my life slip,away,
    Cuz' only she can stop all this,pain,
    And only she can stop this fucking,pain,
    I just wish these sick thoughts would..GO AWAY
    And fucking stop the ache thats down deep inside.-Suicide of The Cephalo Pictorial

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  5. August 16th, 2005, 10:57 AM #5
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    Thanks guys. but keep postin people
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  6. August 16th, 2005, 02:54 PM #6
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    come on people
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  7. August 16th, 2005, 03:52 PM #7
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    i say it to everysingle thing you write because you dont listen....READ THE FUCKIN RULES!!!!!!!there above everybodies work.....there stickyed...go read them..and follow them..and elevate your flow...you dont try on anything you write.....if there werent so many newbies swarmin this site..no one would reply to your shit..and i would eventually stop...ELEVATE..and read tha rules...read tha rules....make sure you read tha rules


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  8. August 24th, 2005, 07:08 AM #8
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  9. August 24th, 2005, 07:55 AM #9
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    I aint like it that much. It was about that you trying to live but you living to die.
    Keep on wrting Homie it will get you better.
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