Topic:Here we go again....
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Topic:Here we go again....
check in by wednesday, drop by friday
check...
ready to lose???
Guns Fire in Unison the bell of war has rung... here we go again
send the meaningless led zipping into flesh... stopping the brain
we seem to maintain a constant struggle for nothing
the sting of death is about the only thing we bring
without a king we cling to a false justice, miss led
we dread what's ahead yet stumble forward and shred
every last word from each others mouth, till all is lost
a holocaust, slowly repeating itself through the ages
sages tell story's of battles, it's written in our pages
watching from the battle field we prepared...
knew how we fared, the end was near, yet we where scared
compared to most battalions we shared emotions
companionship and strife brought us across the oceans
as the troops lined up to fight, the struggle in sight
we knew we wouldn't make it threw the night
adrenaline pumping through my veins.
With a hint of sarcasm...
i mumbled... here we go again.
check .... twix I don't think you know who your facin =).
I voted on 4 trust me
Last edited by TheUnderRated; August 21st, 2005 at 12:13 PM
INSANE JOKA LYRICIST
dammit... just firgured it out... o well you can stomp that verse if you want
Where I Go Ta Callsome 1 Out?
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Here we go again, Fuckers banging on the door..
Yelling obscecities, drunk fuck..calling mom a whore..
She tells me stay in my room and don't come out..
but I can't just leave her when I hear her cry out..
She pulls a key from her cleavage and she locks me in..
I punch the door and scream why do you put up with him?..
I sit and listen to the sound of his backhand meeting her face..
I lift weights and shake, tears run down my face..
I'm gonna train for the day I'm a big enough man..
to defend my mom, this shit is getting out of hand..
I hear her soft cry I know hes covering her mouth..
I picture her forehead the blood running out..
I sit back, meditating I just can't believe ..
This drunk violent rape fest was how I was concieved..
You got NO RIGHT I scream.. I hear his attention to turn..
A slobering voice replys "boy I think its time you learned"..
My mother crys no but he punches her face..
I stand in front of the door anxious for the moment .. I wait..
I hear the wood start to creak and Three vicious pounds..
His hand breaks though .. but i stand my ground..
He unlocks the door his adult figure steps in..
I swell whiskey on his breath and he clutches a bottle of gin..
He recoils his hand to strike .. I close my eyes..
click the switch blade and quickly I'm no longer a child..
My mothers now safe .. she writes me everyday ..
put I couldn't let that go on .. I had to be a man. and make a change..
I sit in my cell and I wonder if there was a better way ..
Well ... you can't change the past journal ....
that's enough for today..
INSANE JOKA LYRICIST
damn....good battle.....
Twic---You had a good verse..... i was feeling your emotion, didnt write much but it was still pretty good, work on making the writer feel it more...but u still did good.
The Great White----You edged Twic out by emotion, and that shit was really deep, i was shook.......work on getting some multi's in there.... but u did good ....i liked yours a little better
v/ TGH by a hair.
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twic..seen better from you...alot better...you lacked on emotion..lacked on imagery...very short..could have elaborated on it more...i liked your verse..but i t could have been better.
TGW...your verse lacked lyricaly and on complexity..but the amount of emotion you incorporated with in your rhymes..was enough to win this battle..very deep...you could use more complexity in your wordpla and rhyme schem..maybe in your multis as well..keep elevatin and nice job.~1~
my vote...TGW
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