ya'll sure is keeping the hits coming in, i see u dropped a longer verse this time.. always good on the internal rhyming skills thats fosho.. i like the metaphor of the rose
i wasnt really feeling the end couple lines tho
hot drop still
stay up
pz
ya'll sure is keeping the hits coming in, i see u dropped a longer verse this time.. always good on the internal rhyming skills thats fosho.. i like the metaphor of the rose
i wasnt really feeling the end couple lines tho
hot drop still
stay up
pz
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man, thanx 4 replyin' to my open mic. this was nice. concrete roses was one of the best open mics i've read so far. thanx again 4 reply and keep droppin these dime pieces.
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Damn yo, this was tight for real, for real. the imagery i thought was off the hook. i personally hate when people talk about a vocabulary being more complex or whatever, cause i dont see that shit mattering as long as the words fit the speech, subject. to many kids are making this shit into a dictionary rhyme insteada words from the soul, and i think you did a good job pullin it off here.
existance doesnt exist,aside from me,i persist
to look for souls in tha mist, no plants in our midst
i thought that bar was dope as fuck, except the no plants in our midst... it kinda threw the flow off. maybe if you used a lil different wording, it would fix it up. but this piece was real nice man, enjoyed the read. keep it dropping.
You really think ur tough... come 'n try me man
I’ll get a hiccup that isn’t spasms of the diaphragm
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Some poetic mastery, although from my current post u couldnt tell, it reminds me of myself when i was big in netceeing. Flow was immaculate, except for a few rough transitions
imagery as mentioned before was vivid, and there was was a couple quotables
8/10
Keep it pimpin pimpn
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yeah this was yet again another dope drop for u. it all flowed together really well and the structure was great. u had a really good use of vocab and threw multies in there which i always like. this piece was definatly worth the read. keep droppin and ill keep readin cuz all ur verses are real good. will u check out my drop call unexplained thoughts. thanx heres a link
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=224410
Last edited by The Source; August 20th, 2005 at 05:53 PM
damn this piece was DOPE! the imagery really stood out..nice multies as well, the title of the piece suited it well..the vocab was great and consistent throughout the piece..the emotion was great as well..once again no flaws, i'ma keep lookin out for your OM's man..keep up the dope work..ONE
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"laced w/in a bed of liquid rock,a vicious shock
if it were ever removed,out from this mistless block
surely it would die,my rose is alive,its petrified
feel a jolt inside,electrified my mind as it synchronized"
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I Cant Say Anything That Hasnt Already Been Said So I'm Just Gonna Tell It Like It Is. This Was A Nice Piece. I Like It Better Than Corrupt Authority.
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