its not that my imagery wasnt there..its that maybe you just didnt understand someof my piece....read it again and youll probably get it....thnks anyway...up.
its not that my imagery wasnt there..its that maybe you just didnt understand someof my piece....read it again and youll probably get it....thnks anyway...up.
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This was a good piece. It flowed well, and had some nice use of vocab. The words were relavent too. You didn't go over the top with it for the sake of it. The imagery was very good, and it helped make this piece what it is. It finished well, and was very good overall.
All I could say really would be to make the imagery more blatent. It was their, but you had to think to understand it. Although I like that, some people don't. From my point of view, this piece was excellent, but from a wider view, the imagery needed to be upped slightly. That's up to you though. You can keep things the same and it'll still be a good piece, or you can make it easier to understand and let it be liked by a wider audience.
Overall it was very nice though.
Can you repay the favour and leave feedback in the OM in my sig (alchemy)? Would greatly apppreciate it.
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no doubt...thnks....up.
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Fuck those sleepers! I was impressed by this one TreaZon, this might be the best piece i've read from you, if not, its definately up there. Your imagery was dopeness plain and simple, creative as hell. Your vocab was at just the right level for the subject matter and you had some good multi's to put the icing on the cake. Think this might be one for the hall of fame mate.
^AGREE
yo go tryout for difiend insticnt we got dope heads
are you nominating this peice for HoF aswell???cause that would be dope
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i thought is was iight u had a couple of multis n shit i. ya'll niggas need 2 check diz shit out.1
"creative. Your vocab was at just the right level for the subject matter and you had some good multi's to put the icing on the cake."
gotta agree wit dat. nice peice. ~1~
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nice vocab everything flowed nicely... unique very unique.. had good vocab and structure.. this is definetley a reccomendation to HoF.. u had alright imainary and multis were there not strong but there..
goood job
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i liked imaginary, structure, flow everything wuz good
i liked the piece a lot looking foward to many more pieces
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Once Again Another Dope Piece Dropped By My Man Keep This Up Hommie I Liked The Emotion Here Imagery Was Okay Not As Good As The Last Piece But Still At It's Best Man I'm Feeling A Collab With You So Let Me Know
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Originally Posted by Johnny 6-feet
Fuck those sleepers! I was impressed by this one TreaZon, this might be the best piece i've read from you, if not, its definately up there. Your imagery was dopeness plain and simple, creative as hell. Your vocab was at just the right level for the subject matter and you had some good multi's to put the icing on the cake. Think this might be one for the hall of fame mate.
Thanks for rep. Keep dropping.
hot drop, top notch spit.
keep up the good work
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